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Prologues are definitely not

Posted on Mon, 18 Jan 2016

Prologues are definitely not old hat when they're as good as this one. I'll leave the pork pie and dinner date for someone else but will just highlight the tiny bit of comic genius that made me snigger:

'St Diodatis, patron saint of...

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Posted in Highly Strung

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A nice start. I like the slow

Posted on Sun, 17 Jan 2016

A nice start. I like the slow introduction of the typical English beach stuff, and then all the gradual clues that it's far from typical. I'd definitely like to read more and find out what happens!

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Posted in Bullets Over Broadstairs

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how about keeping the

Posted on Tue, 12 Jan 2016

how about keeping the kamikaze mention on the TV documentary, then have dead german pilots/bombers in the man's memories. I think the Japanese only operated in the East and against the Us forces. You'd really lose something if you had to do away...

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Posted in As long as sea beats on stone

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A well-painted authentic

Posted on Thu, 07 Jan 2016

A well-painted authentic picture albeit a grim one. There are a couple of places where the present tense shouldn't be.

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Posted in The Drop Zone

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The fourth and fifth

Posted on Sun, 27 Dec 2015

The fourth and fifth paragraph need some editing (typos etc) and are a little confusing in places. Other than that I really enjoyed this. A really good introduction and a fabulous ending - well done!

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Posted in The Glasses

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what a beautiful rhythm this

Posted on Sat, 26 Dec 2015

what a beautiful rhythm this has bee

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Posted in You Send Me

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a very interesting piece!

Posted on Sat, 26 Dec 2015

a very interesting piece!

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Posted in “We must dare to invent the future”

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nice dialogue!

Posted on Sat, 19 Dec 2015

nice dialogue!

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Posted in AlterNativity - Part 4 - Get Away! In A Manger

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Very nice! Two terrifyingly

Posted on Sun, 13 Dec 2015

Very nice! Two terrifyingly vivid characters I very much look forward to reading more about. 

there's a 'was' missing from your penultimate para

 

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Posted in 'The first date' a chapter from my new novel 'And?'

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A beautiful piece of memory.

Posted on Thu, 10 Dec 2015

A beautiful piece of memory. I was disappointed when it finished!

I think you have an autocorrect typo in the third para - where/were

 

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Posted in Josh Rimmer

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