Need Children's Feedback.

I would be very grateful if any parents of young-ish children could assist with feedback on a story..

I have just posted the start of a series of children's stories - The Luffins.  

They are eventually, (hopefully) going to be illustrated.

But for now, I need the opinion of the target audience.  Roughly: 8 - 11 years old. (ish.)

All of my young relatives are either too old or too young.  

So if there are any children (and parents) out there with 5-10 minutes to spare, I would be extremely grateful for some feedback.    

Many thanks,    mayman.

http://www.abctales.com/story/mayman/luffin