I'd love some help with this
Overall, I've enjoyed and learned from the critiques and suggestions on this forum.
Below is a poem that no one seems to like and I'm hoping that perhaps - with your help - something can be done with it.
Is it beyond repair?
I Believe In Yesterday.
Do you ever wonder - just what the hell went wrong?
Today became tomorrow and yesterday was gone.
Yesterday, though not perfect, was better than today.
For in the name of progress so much good was thrown away.
Loving, sharing, caring - they’re fast going out of style.
While hearts grow cold and greedy - only profit brings a smile.
Gone are many values that gave meaning to our life.
Replaced by materialistic mores - that fuels the growing strife.
Do you ever wonder - just what the hell went wrong?
Murders, rapes and mugging - the sick become the strong.
Sex and violence, drink and drugs - replace the fear of God.
A man’s worth is dependent on the thickness of his wad.
Materialism warps our thinking - as it spreads across the land.
While the lonely become lonelier and the lost become the damned.
Don’t worry about the starving - count your blessings and forget.
Don’t care about pollution, Global Warming, Third World Debt.
Don’t listen to the prophets - disregard the old.
The only things that matter are those that can be sold.
For in return for the things you’ve lost - just look at what you’ve gained!
Gadgets, cars and creditcards - Oh, Paradise regained ;o)