RE: What It Is

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Fri, 2008-01-25 00:05

Margharita

RE: What It Is

Topic posted in response to What It Is : http://www.abctales.com/story/margharita/what-it

Hi Folks

I don't normally do this for my own work, but I'd be very grateful to anyone who could find time to have a look at this and possibly leave a comment. It's the first scene of a stage play, it forms part of my MA portfolio and I am also hoping to submit it to a theatre in the real world when (if!) it's ready. Please be honest, brutal if you like. I'm pretty tough!

I should warn you...there will be more...

Many thanks

Margharita

Fri, 2008-01-25 08:17

Kropotkin38

Funny & dark. I don't think I'm really qualified to comment further on a play, except to say that I really enjoyed the sign being changed behind Bea, I just wish that she hadn't said anything - perhaps just a direction for her to look resigned would have worked better.

Fri, 2008-01-25 10:48

Lorraine_Mace

www.lorrainemace.com This really flows well and is both funny and sad by turns. I'm sure your tutor will be pleased with it.

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Fri, 2008-01-25 12:38

ggggareth

Hi Margharita, I've added some comments under the script. Thought it would copy the comments here, but it hasn't. Gareth

Fri, 2008-01-25 14:06

Margharita

Thanks to all who've commented - I really appreciate you all taking the time. I've replied properly in the comments box. It's been really constructive feedback. Cheers M

Fri, 2008-01-25 19:38

blackjack-davey

I replied underneath your extract. I also really enjoyed The Summer House which I commented on under the collection of stories.

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