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56 of my 353 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 65 votes
56 of my comments have received 65 Great Feedback votes
i can't understand the first
Posted on Tue, 11 Aug 2015
i can't understand the first para... there seems to be lots of typos:
Josh rubbed his three day stubble and looked turned towards Lyn, who smiled sternly.
The kids were being noisy and the traffic was heavy. A combination...
Posted in Whistle on the wynd part 1
I really enjoyed the clarity
Posted on Sun, 29 Dec 2013
I really enjoyed the clarity of the writing, especially the 'insomniac sensory memory...' the power of an image to spring out at you in the present and clarify some aspect of the past. something you want to forget or had forgotten..The Dance...Read full comment
Posted in Remembering M
brilliant, you make us in the
Posted on Wed, 30 Mar 2016
brilliant, you make us in the first extract breathless and tense as the baby, and this world reads like some weird dangerous planet 'soaring carbon dioxide levels...' Brings home the jaw-dropping fragility with the trapdoor sealing itself of...Read full comment
Posted in First Breath:Last Breath
I love the echo from Futility
Posted on Wed, 08 Jul 2015
I love the echo from Futility the sun-warmed arms in the classroom and the sun that fails to wake the dead boy in France. Setting it in school gives added weight and poignancy to the cold clays being dragged and shaped and...Read full comment
Posted in Chinook (Poetry Monthly)
Great choice for story of the
Posted on Wed, 06 Aug 2014
Great choice for story of the week. I particularly like the skill and ease of the transition from third person view point to Phyllis's interior, effortless and no hiccoughs-- hard to pull off.
The domestic details of dusting become cosmic...Read full comment
Posted in Dust
this really struck a chord--
Posted on Sun, 11 May 2014
this really struck a chord-- eating our parents before they devour us is the founding myth of civilization (that's what that guy said in the gents), blood guilt shackles us together. I like the way you've domesticated the details to a Sunday...Read full comment
Posted in Family Dinner
I'm so sorry to hear the
Posted on Wed, 20 Apr 2016
I'm so sorry to hear the latest news after all you've been through and I hope you feel better. You're a great advocate for why this site is different from other writing sites, all your thousands of thought out critiques-- I hope you get out...Read full comment
Posted in Bee's Journey
there is so much more. Bubble
Posted on Sun, 07 Feb 2016
there is so much more. Bubble gum by mark lanegan
I like the image of these things nourished in the dark, by the dark--- fungi especially do not need sunlight(is that right?) takes me back to a mick rock interview about syd barrett living...Read full comment
Posted in Prolific (Poetry Monthly)