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I have 33 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 70615 times and 59 of my stories have been cherry picked.
53 of my 342 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 60 votes

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Beavercreek

Beavercreek was built high up in the snow under the shadow of Old Luther’s Knob that stiff, unbending granite stump jabbing into the clouds, defiant...
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Lost Tribes Re-edit

Of all the mutations central to human development, the schizophrenic gene, the ability to hear voices, the desire to make comparisons about nothing—...
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Summer of Love

It was a glorious summer, heat and spiky aloes and the clear desert air and all this optimism, this crazy cabalistic energy or synergy or whatever...
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The Sewing Machine

The Sewing Machine As a young man, I was fond of walking holidays and particularly liked the wilds of Scotland, covering vast distances by foot. They...
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Wolf-pack

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53 of my comments have received 60 Great Feedback votes

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I think this is a great

Posted on Fri, 18 Apr 2014

I think this is a great premise and a gripping read. The postman is the messenger, and no one wants to hear the message. He connects all the misconnections but is ignored. For my money, I think,  the last section with his own story should be...

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Posted in The postman

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I loved the propulsion of

Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014

I loved the propulsion of this story, the shrinking and expanding houses and the Kafkaesque fear of social embarrassment--- great pace. there must a specific conditon called Fear of Dinner Parties, you nail it on the head. Maybe you might like...

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Posted in The Dinner Party

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I like this too, the

Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014

I like this too, the stillness

it is like a tableau,  a tapestry of a woman knitting by the window and that ties in with the Tennyson

I wondered about the sequence and also the penultimate paragraph... when they sleep together for...

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Posted in Knit One Slip One Part 2

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What a great beginning, the

Posted on Fri, 23 Aug 2013

What a great beginning, the everyday surreality of the slipping gradient of the road tipping the narraror into topsy-turvy land... and I love ghost stories. Even the lollipop man's pronouncements, after drink and drugs he specifies glue-...

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Posted in school photos

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can you break it down? who is

Posted on Sun, 06 Apr 2014

can you break it down? who is timing it?

Pre-destination, is it a high-fallutin term for determinism?

as long as we believe we've got free will does it matter?

the man who leaves work on a warm summer evening and thinks I can...

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Posted in life, the universe and everything

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I liked this Stuart (and I

Posted on Sun, 06 Apr 2014

I liked this Stuart (and I liked the illustration). What I liked most is that your story doesn't end predictably, there  is no immediate reconciliation, there is the hint that the story might be one of enforced captivity when the husband takes...

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Posted in real eyes

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I found the beginning

Posted on Tue, 25 Mar 2014

I found the beginning compelling. The drugs and decadence have a nineteenth century flavour because of phrases like 'solace of sleep.' Although set in Ohio (and I guess relatively contemporary) it floats in a different time zone, maybe that's...

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Posted in Don't Wake Up

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Thanks Andrea

Posted on Mon, 17 Mar 2014

Thanks Andrea

I think I might agree-- I know the general rule of thumb is no exclamation marks unless you're portraying an excitable correspondent: 'I am so over Jeremy! Totally! his silly little button mushroom nose and his habit...

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Posted in Martha's Moved On

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The first stanza sets up the

Posted on Sat, 08 Mar 2014

The first stanza sets up the heart as a chunk of rock, a meteorite in space with all its chasms and toxins, and goes on to describe one man's abusive relationship with the one thing that keeps him alive-- the one thing that he hasn't ripped out....

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Posted in My Graffiti Heart

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i like all the details that

Posted on Fri, 21 Feb 2014

i like all the details that make reality so convincing -in fact it's the things that happen in between the plot  that are my favouirte bits- the mall, cigarettes and night sky. One suggestion is you might consider easing off slightly on the songs...

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Posted in Bridesmaids' Tights

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