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Beavercreek
Beavercreek was built high up in the snow under the shadow of Old Luther’s Knob that stiff, unbending granite stump jabbing into the clouds, defiant...
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Lost Tribes Re-edit
Of all the mutations central to human development, the schizophrenic gene, the ability to hear voices, the desire to make comparisons about nothing—...
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Summer of Love
It was a glorious summer, heat and spiky aloes and the clear desert air and all this optimism, this crazy cabalistic energy or synergy or whatever...
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The Sewing Machine
The Sewing Machine As a young man, I was fond of walking holidays and particularly liked the wilds of Scotland, covering vast distances by foot. They...
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I think this is a great
Posted on Fri, 18 Apr 2014
I think this is a great premise and a gripping read. The postman is the messenger, and no one wants to hear the message. He connects all the misconnections but is ignored. For my money, I think, the last section with his own story should be...
Read full commentPosted in The postman
I loved the propulsion of
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
I loved the propulsion of this story, the shrinking and expanding houses and the Kafkaesque fear of social embarrassment--- great pace. there must a specific conditon called Fear of Dinner Parties, you nail it on the head. Maybe you might like...
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I like this too, the
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
I like this too, the stillness
it is like a tableau, a tapestry of a woman knitting by the window and that ties in with the Tennyson
I wondered about the sequence and also the penultimate paragraph... when they sleep together for...
Read full commentPosted in Knit One Slip One Part 2
What a great beginning, the
Posted on Fri, 23 Aug 2013
What a great beginning, the everyday surreality of the slipping gradient of the road tipping the narraror into topsy-turvy land... and I love ghost stories. Even the lollipop man's pronouncements, after drink and drugs he specifies glue-...
Read full commentPosted in school photos
I liked this Stuart (and I
Posted on Sun, 06 Apr 2014
I liked this Stuart (and I liked the illustration). What I liked most is that your story doesn't end predictably, there is no immediate reconciliation, there is the hint that the story might be one of enforced captivity when the husband takes...
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I found the beginning
Posted on Tue, 25 Mar 2014
I found the beginning compelling. The drugs and decadence have a nineteenth century flavour because of phrases like 'solace of sleep.' Although set in Ohio (and I guess relatively contemporary) it floats in a different time zone, maybe that's...
Read full commentPosted in Don't Wake Up
Thanks Andrea
Posted on Mon, 17 Mar 2014
Thanks Andrea
I think I might agree-- I know the general rule of thumb is no exclamation marks unless you're portraying an excitable correspondent: 'I am so over Jeremy! Totally! his silly little button mushroom nose and his habit...
Read full commentPosted in Martha's Moved On
The first stanza sets up the
Posted on Sat, 08 Mar 2014
The first stanza sets up the heart as a chunk of rock, a meteorite in space with all its chasms and toxins, and goes on to describe one man's abusive relationship with the one thing that keeps him alive-- the one thing that he hasn't ripped out....
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I think it's very moving the
Posted on Sun, 16 Feb 2014
I think it's very moving the description of the rooms, the rooms Pat will be exchanging for other identical rooms, his ongoing containment and confinement although he is free. Simplicity of the last stanzas matches the starkness of these final...
Read full commentPosted in Biography - Dave's Booking-In Notes 2002
brilliant... the suspended
Posted on Tue, 28 Jan 2014
brilliant... the suspended animation of the open music score and the details of the cindered incense. very, very sad
Read full commentPosted in What Remains
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