bluefalang by a young southern oregon ex pat.

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Mon, 2006-02-13 10:40

http://www.abctales.com/story/bluefalang/by-a-young-southern-oregon-expa...

for me in this poem the highlight was the fish that worried in their primal way. Overall i thought it a bit wordy and it would benefit (imho) from a careful edit But on the whole a lovely read;

best wishes.
maisie.

Mon, 2006-02-13 12:14

Belle

i liked the way it was so evocative, and the interweaving of the natural and the personal. my favourtie bit was the part about the fish too.

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