While I am waiting by Yutka

From this tree, look, I took
the shining fruit of my inspiration
hooked it up as stars in your skies.

I have no idea why you would think that people would find it hard to like your stuff, what a great start :)

Now watching you while I am waiting,
your praise is reverberating
with the riddle of unattached eyes.

this is where all of a sudden we are beset with "ings" is there any escape from them?

From this water, look, I took
the precious fish of my imagination,
served it well-dressed in surprise.

back to the initial format, but in the water this time, again nicelly served up.. hope you had a lemon slice with it :)

Now watching you while I am waiting
your praise is reverberating
with the riddle of unsmiling eyes.

i really think that you want to watch these "ings" they are multiple, do you think they are out of control?