Forever and a Day by QueenElf

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Thu, 2006-03-09 14:33

Wow, there's some good writing coming on here at the moment.

This really isn't my kind of thing at all - but this is so good that it works. Past lives, future lives, intertwining fate. There's hints and clues, there's allegory and image. Very good indeed:

http://www.abctales.com/story/queenelf/forever-and-a-day

Thu, 2006-03-09 17:19

SpeedyG

I enjoyed this well written story, but was expecting more of a sting in the tail. IE no suprises!

Thu, 2006-03-09 18:41

Silver Spun Sand

Really enjoyed this. A well-deserved cherry in my humble opinion. Incidentally, I tried yoga once and gave it up when we had to stand on our heads!!!!!!!!!

Fri, 2006-03-10 12:42

Juliet OC

i loved the idea of this, doomed lovers always trying to outdo fate but failing each time. superbly written, just about the right length with a gripping pace. Juliet

Juliet

Fri, 2006-03-10 12:58

Foster

a great idea turned into a great story. it makes me wonder what other adventures these two will have. one sentence, almost the last: Maybe this time it will turn out right this time did you mean to use "this time" twice? i guess a case could be made for it, but i wasn't sure. excellent story.

Fri, 2006-03-10 16:04

QueenElf

Thanks for the comments everyone. Actually is was Maise who 1st flagged this up and I altered the orignial story for her, (dropping a few hints as suggested). I think it only goes to show that no two people think the same about a story. (sorry Speedy, the original gave no hints). I'll alter the typo, I've been offline for a few days.

Lfuller

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