Midweek.

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Midweek.

http://www.abctales.com/story/juliet-oc/midweek

What a great concept, this is the best story I've read in years. Brill, Juliet, Lisa.

ty for the flag - i would really appreciate any constructive comments on how it could be improved further. Any takers? Juliet

Juliet

Yeah - this is excellent. When the story started I thought the conceit would run out of steam but you kept the ideas coming. I loved the idea of depressed monday trying to act like the life of the party for bank holidays. The dialogue was interesting, the characters were very clear. One thing I noticed was that the characters explain their illnesses a bit too much. Obviously they know each other quite well so it felt like the explanations were for the reader's benefit. I think I quickly got the idea that each day had its own psychological make-up and from that point, it was really fun to read into their personalities. So I would just be careful of over explaining - I know that wednesday explains his mania twice. Otherwise, i thought it could perhaps be a touch shorter, not because it isn't all enjoyable but just because a story based on a conceit, in my opinion, tends to have a shorter life span. Much as you work brilliantly with these characters, and you even manage to get some depth into them, I think the story always feels a bit like a good idea taken to its logical conclusion. But these are all just my opinions! Thanks for a great read, Joe
ty Joe - really helpful, i've cut just over a 100 words from it now, so it is under 2000. It reads much better. Juliet

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