Forever & a Day by Queenelf.

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Tue, 2006-03-07 22:01

http://www.abctales.com/story/queenelf/forever-and-a-day

Really enjoyed this story but found the closing turn very choppy. It almost cried for more rather than less hints before hand, I also much enjoyed your descriptive bent, i personally find it hard going when told to describe something.... i tend to rush to conversational mode and scurry thro with that... :) All in all a pleasure to read :)

ps. i missed the discussion about being critical, but reserve the right to say what i please, where i please etc :) lol.

Wed, 2006-03-08 08:45

QueenElf

Thanks Maisie,I wasn't happy with the ending either, I know I need to work on it. I was trying too hard to be clever, to depersonailse the characters by not using names. I'm always happy to recieve critical comments, and act on them, actually I prefer honesty, as long as the knife isn't twisted in too deep. LOL.

Lfuller

Wed, 2006-03-08 13:31

QueenElf

http://www.abctales.com/node/550164 Iv'e done some editing on the orginal story, the trouble is I don't know how to use HTML to put the italics in. This has rather ruined my ending, which relies heavily on italics to make it work. All comments and advice welcome. And, Maisie, this one's for you.

Lfuller

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