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There's some wonderful imagery in this piece, although it needs a little edit as it is perhaps a bit repetitive in places - also some grammatical typos (eg don't/doesn't). Welcome to ABC!
I'm glad to hear she did something about it in the end. This poem rings very true - all the sad excuses, always the same it seems. Heartbreaking last line.
Hello Darkpink and welcome to ABC. There's some fantastic imagery in this piece. It does need a good edit. Quite a few places where the words you've chosen don't seem to quite match what's needed. I'm not sure if you used a thesaurus perhaps?...
nice dialogue!
Posted on Sat, 19 Dec 2015
nice dialogue!
Read full commentPosted in AlterNativity - Part 4 - Get Away! In A Manger
Very nice! Two terrifyingly
Posted on Sun, 13 Dec 2015
Very nice! Two terrifyingly vivid characters I very much look forward to reading more about.
there's a 'was' missing from your penultimate para
Read full commentPosted in 'The first date' a chapter from my new novel 'And?'
A beautiful piece of memory.
Posted on Thu, 10 Dec 2015
A beautiful piece of memory. I was disappointed when it finished!
I think you have an autocorrect typo in the third para - where/were
Read full commentPosted in Josh Rimmer
I like the way you're
Posted on Mon, 07 Dec 2015
I like the way you're approaching it from different angles. Perhaps you should make clear in the title this is a part of the previous story?
Read full commentPosted in The Ripped T-shirt III - Whiskey & Justice on the rocks
There's some wonderful
Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015
There's some wonderful imagery in this piece, although it needs a little edit as it is perhaps a bit repetitive in places - also some grammatical typos (eg don't/doesn't). Welcome to ABC!
Read full commentPosted in The Fallen one
very nicely written. I wonder
Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015
very nicely written. I wonder how many penis adorned desks there are in the country?
Read full commentPosted in the anatomically correct penis
beautifully done Tina. Have I
Posted on Wed, 25 Nov 2015
beautifully done Tina. Have I read this before?
Read full commentPosted in Seeing the Light
'Hitler drank tap water' -
Posted on Tue, 24 Nov 2015
'Hitler drank tap water' - brilliant line!
Read full commentPosted in Blood is thicker than water
I'm glad to hear she did
Posted on Thu, 19 Nov 2015
I'm glad to hear she did something about it in the end. This poem rings very true - all the sad excuses, always the same it seems. Heartbreaking last line.
Read full commentPosted in Happy families
Hello Darkpink and welcome to
Posted on Tue, 10 Nov 2015
Hello Darkpink and welcome to ABC. There's some fantastic imagery in this piece. It does need a good edit. Quite a few places where the words you've chosen don't seem to quite match what's needed. I'm not sure if you used a thesaurus perhaps?...
Read full commentPosted in Ice Heart
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