Naughty by Nature, Harry Keardon, Chapter 9.

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Sun, 2006-03-12 14:44

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Harry's story is gaining momentum. I liked the sense of parnoia, which is apparent to anyone who know's about the use of Speed.(I only tried it once and vowed I would never do it again.) I'd like to see some descriptive passages, but I know we don't all write the same. Still, writing a book is a long haul and needs the occassional encouragement by fellow members go for it Harry.

Sun, 2006-03-12 19:15

Juliet OC

i am only up to chapter 3 - but am enjoying the memories. My only crit at this stage is more show and less tell. Juliet

Juliet

Mon, 2006-03-13 12:15

Moimo

Cheers for the feedback, much needed, will be trying to write it more descriptive and also try and explain how I was seeing and feeling at those times. Only problem will be I fear nobody will talk to me once seeing what a nasty piece of work I was! (only joking) Thanks again Harry Kerdean

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