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hey evry1 I'm new,and lil. I was jus wundrin if sum ppl cud luk @ my poems n help me(constructive criticism,not takin d p**s)/let me kno wat they think.
jennie xxx

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y don u wryt proply? dis aint sumwhere 4 u 2 do txt spkng. ppl will fink u wryt lik it all da time & no 1 wil bova. k?
donignacio
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Ack, would you guys quit speaking German? I can do Spanish though a bit, ole!
technicolour
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sorry!I cannot help it I was trying to quickly write it before I was sick all over the computer my deepest apologies.So will anybody help???what donignacio???
donignacio
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I'm sorry I can't help -- I really don't understand poetry. I've tried writing it myself and it was god-awful stuff, no rhythym stuff with one-dimensional themes that Opra Winfrey would even shoot down in a milisecond. Perhaps you'll have more luck with an ABCtales poet. I'm just the village idiot. Dar, dar, dee, dum, dah. *Wanders off, scratching armpit, swatting invisible fly, chewing marmelade*
Tony Cook
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So - an American who knows what marmalade is - even if he can't spell it. But can he make it? Or even marmalade! Poets - look at technicolour's stuff and tell us what you think!
egriff
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hey - does someone speak spanish? that's great because I can't. let me tell you that Don... whatsit may not be a poet, but he CAN write! and I'm the sweeper up here! get over to the wine and cheese party, you fool, its been running since yesterday - we need new blood! (and most people there are sick as well . Here, let me get that aphorism! its been lying there since last week.
donignacio
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I've decided to start writing a bunch of poems by my alter-ego. I'm not the greatest speller on the planet, (cemetary, neccessary, embarass, tthe) and, anyway, marmalade isn't something hard to come by in the states.
technicolour
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go u donignacio!nearly all of my poems have a deeper meaning to them and if you knew me well you'd find they seem to be my altar-ego. BUT THATS NOT THE POINT I NEED HELP!!!RAAAH THE VOICES IN MY HEAD AREN'T HELPING ME ANYMORE!i dont like marmalade.but i like scratching my armpits...when theyre itchy.oo marmalade armpits that could make a good poem!
Liana
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ive stood at the altar with two egos.....
egriff
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I would stand away!
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