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My stories have been read 559002 times
and 170 of my stories have been cherry picked.
2512 of my 15,637 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 2566 votes
There's a lot to cut when you
Posted on Sat, 21 May 2016
There's a lot to cut when you do your next draft - too much waffle, but the voice is very well done - very believable, and this is a brilliant line! Do keep going..
'He is a Smiths playlist away from rock bottom'
Read full commentPosted in Tara (snippet 2)
Part of something bigger? I'd
Posted on Sat, 14 May 2016
Part of something bigger? I'd love to read more of this..
Read full commentPosted in Untitled
Beautifully done. The
Posted on Thu, 12 May 2016
Beautifully done. The repetition works really well. One to read aloud
Read full commentPosted in Delicate
you rated the story fine! It
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
you rated the story fine! It's just if you know you have something not U rated in the first few lines, then make sure you create a teaser without those words - so in this instance I omitted the 'fucked in the head'. I hope that makes sense
Read full commentPosted in Some False Sense Of Security
You've correctly categorised
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
You've correctly categorised this as an 18, but the teaser (which defaults to the first couple of lines) appears on the front page, and so it has to be U rated - as well as the title. I've fixed this one for you
Read full commentPosted in Some False Sense Of Security
if it's published, why not
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
if it's published, why not put a link here, so people can buy it? If not, I'd love to read another extract!
Read full commentPosted in Mwambeshi Memories
A delightful piece of life
Posted on Wed, 13 Apr 2016
A delightful piece of life writing. Is it part of something bigger?
Read full commentPosted in Mwambeshi Memories
A good start! I like the way
Posted on Sun, 10 Apr 2016
A good start! I like the way it jumps all over the place (in sync with the character). Do post more soon
Read full commentPosted in Vodka
A very interesting idea!
Posted on Sat, 02 Apr 2016
A very interesting idea!
Read full commentPosted in Another time Another Place
I didn't see that coming!
Posted on Wed, 30 Mar 2016
I didn't see that coming! This might work even better if you drew it out a bit - spent more time on the hunt for the man, perhaps even his history. Very well done as it is though!
Read full commentPosted in Scarlet sunrise
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