RE: The Dental Cleaning
Tue, 2008-06-10 11:47
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RE: The Dental Cleaning
Topic posted in response to The Dental Cleaning : http://www.abctales.com/story/seannelson/the-dental-cleaning
Why can't I comment on the work itself? Am trying to enjoy the 'Random story' function, and my gosh this is one helluva random poem!
'the receptionist had Multiple Sclerosis
and we sat glumly in the waiting room full of almost brilliant paintings
of bright mallard ducks and amply-racked bucks'
Puts the reader right there with regard surroundings and emotions of the poet, sheer genius.
Also, 'my skeleton hurt' = yes! What a line!
Sooz006
I'm the same Jen, I love the random stories but if you can't let the prson know that you enjoyed them , then what's the point in reading them? However with the site being so huge now, I suppose all those stories take a lot of work in maintaining them and extra comments means extra work and extra space that the site uses.
tcook
It has now been awarded a very late cherry thanks to your flagging. We turned on the comment boxes a few months ago now and anything posted before that does not have a comment box. It would mean that we had to go back one by one and put them on - and with the many tens of thousands in the system, that is impractical!
jennifer
Fair enough. You see how out of touch I have been in my blocked up world?! I think it's a great idea and I think the piece mentioned is totally deserved of a cherry!
onemorething
Ah ok, well if we can retrospectively highlight pieces here, then what about this...
http://www.abctales.com/story/jennifer/waste-of-time
Read it the other day - thought it was great.
Loved the metaphor. Loved the last few lines. A very old one of yours.
jennifer
Thank you, Doeslittle. I was very angry when I wrote that! However, I seem to be missing a word in the transfer from the old site -
this stanza -
'What will you do
with all this new ?????????
but it won't be yours,
it'll be wasted,
me-less
and uncelebrated.'
Help!
onemorething
Material...just kidding.
Scrap new and just have 'all this space' or 'all this vacancy'.
jennifer
Space!
'Tis done...
thank you for remembering this poem to me, I had quite forgotten it!