Although there are some truly horrible typos in this (please correct them!) it really is a fine piece of writing. It takes us through a traumatic incident in stop/start sequences that may or may not be in or out of order. It doesn't matter. Original and good:

http://www.abctales.com/hiddenspace/worth_it

Now tell us what you think.

Hey I have to write a short story about some sort of rivalry... but I can't think of anything that hasn't been done before... anyhave any cool ideas?????

Hey, this is really great. I love this in particular:

"I love the men I sleep with, sometimes briefly, but the love is there
and it's real. She brings in clothes from the balcony line
cracks a shirt in the air. A whip for his back.
Dropping pegs into a tub on the floor she curses her life. Under her breath.
Tomorrow when she slices onions, I will cry for her."

I'll even experiment with the bookmarks, Tony!

Ben

I'm sure there's a techno person out there who can explain in idiot terms, how the hell I can get rid of Dyfica.2.AX?

This is absolutley fantastic. Funny, fresh, original...from the end of the first paragraph I was hooked. The whole thing is wonderfully imaginative and brilliantly excecuted.

Just thought I'd point out a couple of things I noticed: 3rd paragraph, 3rd line, 'again' should be 'against', I think. And also, Starbucks is one word. Also this line:

'I'll hit you, damn it.' He threatened

Should be:

'I'll hit you, damn it,' he threatened.

God, I'm pedantic.

http://www.abctales.com/hilary_west/eddie

Strong piece, Hilary, that immediately reminded me of the man and his daring motorcyle exploits. Checking I found that he ended with a different pair of wheels - sad!
However it seems that it's not all bad news...
http://www.amazon.co.uk/exec/obidos/ASIN/1903402204/qid%3D1125602874/202...

Stunning, just stunning:

http://www.abctales.com/barely_black_francis/the_only_way_is_up

I've bookmarked this one and will keep coming back to it.

Do you use your bookmarks\?

Your writting makes me want to sit down with a cup of coffee and twenty marlborough lights.It's like a warm blunket, like your other writting on this set 'Damaged Goods'. I have no idea why you're not published and please, please keep on writting!

http://www.abctales.com/node/526974

soraia