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Very much enjoyed this!

Posted on Sun, 27 Apr 2014

Very much enjoyed this!

Two small typos:

"Uncle Gunder, a renown physicist"

 

"Sunday’s just got more interesting. "  (unless of course you actually mean only that one Sunday)

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Posted in The Broheim Men

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beautifully and sensitively

Posted on Sun, 13 Apr 2014

beautifully and sensitively observed - well done

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Posted in Goodbye will be farewell

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this is looking better too!

Posted on Mon, 31 Mar 2014

this is looking better too! One more tip (and it's something I always do): in the dialogue, once I've written it, I always go back and make sure I've abbreviated things in the way one would if one were talking - I've, it's etc etc. It makes...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Three

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ha - made me laugh! I always

Posted on Sat, 05 Apr 2014

ha - made me laugh! I always wonder where you get your plots from...

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Posted in Larry and Mick Get Frozen

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The dialogue in this part is

Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014

The dialogue in this part is much better! The only bit I found slightly hard to believe was here:

 

“Yes, it is not looking good but if there is one  thing we can take from this it is that we seem to be heading for a planet that can...

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Posted in The Labour Planet A Working Title Part Four 1118 words

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I'm still really enjoying

Posted on Mon, 31 Mar 2014

I'm still really enjoying this - and i see congratulations are in order for being pick of the day! I have one tiny suggestion for this part:  the dialogue at the end, between the woman and the man is great - very authentic, but the conversation...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Three

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what a fantastic opening

Posted on Sat, 29 Mar 2014

what a fantastic opening chapter - I'm very much looking forward to reading the next part!

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - First Draft

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Hello - this was very

Posted on Tue, 18 Mar 2014

Hello - this was very readable, it has a nice easy flow to it. It is quite slow moving though, and i think it could be improved with a good edit - maybe cut it down by a third or so? Welcome to ABC!

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Posted in All my creation - chapter 1

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This is very well done. I

Posted on Mon, 17 Mar 2014

This is very well done. I like the use of repetition, and I think the ending is a good one. It would definitely be worth going through this again with your spellcheck: your English is fantastic, but there are some adjustments needed

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Posted in Lucky Number Seven

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Albert, why don't you put a

Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014

Albert, why don't you put a clickable link to your novel on here - and also in the forum? I'm sure you'll get more of an audience that way. good luck!

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Posted in ONE GOOD TURN

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