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My stories have been read 270378 times
and 170 of my stories have been cherry picked.
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Much better as a two-parter!
Posted on Tue, 11 Aug 2015
Much better as a two-parter!
Read full commentPosted in Whistle on the wynd part 2
Very nicely paced, and I like
Posted on Mon, 10 Aug 2015
Very nicely paced, and I like the interweaving of the relationship issues with the main plot. I think it needs a through going through for simple things that could do with being fixed (you say he has epilepsy, then you say he has an unrecognised...
Read full commentPosted in whistle on the Wynd (edit)
this is a good opening piece
Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015
this is a good opening piece - I like the way you give so many clues to the reader
Read full commentPosted in The Mohair Bear - part one
how beautiful this is! I wish
Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2015
how beautiful this is! I wish you'd post more often..
Read full commentPosted in Elephant Song
Welcome to ABC R. - I enjoyed
Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2015
Welcome to ABC R. - I enjoyed this story. Was it deliberate that you kept it gender neutral right up until fairly near the end?
A couple of suggestions:
you change to the present tense after this
One of them reaches for his...
Read full commentPosted in Passage
I enjoyed this - thank you!
Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015
I enjoyed this - thank you!
Read full commentPosted in High Summer
you could also put a photo up
Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2015
you could also put a photo up? (don't forget to choose only something which has permission to publish elsewhere)
for anyone who didn't know before this poem, catherine's written (beautifully) about this subject in the past - you should...
Read full commentPosted in Not Years
Wonderful! You have such a
Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2015
Wonderful! You have such a talent for creating characters and a sense of place. Well done, and thank you for posting this
Read full commentPosted in The Almsbury Ritual Part 2
very real and beautifully
Posted on Tue, 02 Jun 2015
very real and beautifully captured. Well done Bee.
on a very frivolous note, I had an MRI on my head last year (they found nothing!) and they gave me headphones and a list of music. Took one look and said no thanks. Then the minute I was...
Read full commentPosted in Panic Button
Hello Crowefoot - firstly
Posted on Thu, 28 May 2015
Hello Crowefoot - firstly welcome to ABC! I've read all three parts and I think this has the making of a really good story
A couple of suggestions:
in part one, I realise you're trying to differentiate between the characters but I...
Read full commentPosted in A Prophecy of a Beautiful Devil Part 1
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