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A very honest piece. A sense

Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016

A very honest piece. A sense of disassociation from the world, lonliness and frustration.

If you'd like feedback I'd suggest you lose the introductory piece in capitals. Perhaps add it at the end (but not in caps - that looks quite shouty...

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Posted in I awoke today. A Physical Sense Gone, How Did I Get Here?

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Awful how words can destory

Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016

Awful how words can destory someone isn't it. If it's fiction, it's very convincing

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Posted in BEST DAYS OF YOUR LIFE?

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So pleased to hear you're on

Posted on Wed, 17 Feb 2016

So pleased to hear you're on the offensive now. Enjoy the boogaloo!

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Posted in The Doctor's First Dozen Words

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Hello Tom - there's a real

Posted on Mon, 15 Feb 2016

Hello Tom - there's a real wealth of detail in this piece. For feedback I would suggest that you simplify your language a little. Did you use a thesaurus? Some of the words you've chosen don't have the meaning I think you wanted

Welcome to...

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Posted in The effluvium by the sea.

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now I'm enjoying this! I like

Posted on Thu, 11 Feb 2016

now I'm enjoying this! I like the ambiguity of the relationship between the two men - the way it seems to have more depth than in the previous parts. I think there's more balance in this part too, between action and backstory, although I...

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Posted in The Net Caster (Part Three)

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hahah - Bee they are

Posted on Mon, 08 Feb 2016

hahah - Bee they are brilliant! I think I've come across photos of them while searching for pictures for your Journey series. I do hope you're going to write the knitter a thank you poem and direct her to ABCTales to read it? (and the rest of...

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Posted in Knitted Knockers

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sometimes all the 'we's are a

Posted on Thu, 04 Feb 2016

sometimes all the 'we's are a bit confusing, but mainly this is well written, with humour, dignity and refreshing honesty. Thank you for posting it

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Posted in We Can't Believe We Have cancer

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I enjoyed this thoughtful

Posted on Wed, 03 Feb 2016

I enjoyed this thoughtful piece ice. You might be interested to read Bee's journey - we have it on our front page.

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it's 'affect' both times

it should be who, not whom all the times you've used it here

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Posted in Yes, We Have Cancer

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Me too! You might want to

Posted on Mon, 01 Feb 2016

Me too! You might want to remove one of the two consequentlys here:

Consequently, a young gentleman was often judged on the size of his folly. Consequently, any young unmarried gentleman who never displayed his ha-ha to his intended was...

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Posted in A Notorious Historical Dandy

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Prologues are definitely not

Posted on Mon, 18 Jan 2016

Prologues are definitely not old hat when they're as good as this one. I'll leave the pork pie and dinner date for someone else but will just highlight the tiny bit of comic genius that made me snigger:

'St Diodatis, patron saint of...

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Posted in Highly Strung

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