Mark Burrow

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I have 76 stories published in 4 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 65335 times and 139 of my stories have been cherry picked.
84 of my 537 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 86 votes

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My stories

Lilly Ng and the Starlight Burger Bar

1. Career Opportunities When Leon Fish was 15-years old he told Mr Bier, his depressed and cynical Careers teacher, that he wanted to become a captain of industry.
Cherry

Tinder – Ch 10 – Lewis

Some residents were bad. Albert, he was the worst by far.
Cherry

Tinder - ch 4 - Barry

Everyone’s entitled to their own opinions. I’m not saying I’m always right.
Cherry

Tinder – Ch 3 – Dee

My younger brother Mike has a terrific sense of humour. He has this infectious laugh that cracks people up.
Cherry

Tinder – Part 2 – Terry

For the past couple of weeks I had been on at Deirdre to let me have a go. ‘That’s one way traffic,’ she’d say, cackling like a hyena.

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84 of my comments have received 86 Great Feedback votes

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"Milking moonshine."

Posted on Fri, 14 Aug 2020

"Milking moonshine." Brilliant. Love the layers of language here, building a sense of mystery. 

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Posted in The Departure of Nightjars

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Poignant was the word that

Posted on Tue, 04 Aug 2020

Poignant was the word that came to me as well. The tone of this is spot on. It's crazy how all the safety nets for the most vulnerable are being systematically removed. 

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Posted in On The Covid Road To Armageddon

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Yes, you've hit the nail on

Posted on Mon, 03 Aug 2020

Yes, you've hit the nail on the head with this Luigi. I sometimes think this vile pandemic is just a little taster of what's to come if we don't act soon. 

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Posted in As the Walrus Said

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The contrasts in the imagery

Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2020

The contrasts in the imagery are great. Well deserved pick of the day. 

You're very welcome to simply listen in for the Zoom reading if you wish. No pressure - but understand if you prefer not to. 

 

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Posted in Boys From An Ancient Wood

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The style of this feels

Posted on Fri, 31 Jul 2020

The style of this feels different. Love how the voice carries you along -- the ending didn't quite land for me, though (I think it's the mass depondency paragraph). 

However, this did remind me an episode of Kilroy, where a bloke from...

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Posted in Minnesota Fats

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"thin and permeable air".

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2020

"thin and permeable air". Beautiful poem. Loved it. 

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Posted in Love is a Labour

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This is spuddy great! 

Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020

This is spuddy great! 

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Posted in Boiled, Deep-fried, Steamed and Mashed

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Haha! I'm intrigued by the

Posted on Tue, 07 Jul 2020

Haha! I'm intrigued by the horn, poodle and WD40. Yes, it needs more. Agreed .The challenge I set myself was to keep it at 250 words. I want to write v short pieces while trying to finish a longer piece of work. I should try another version to...

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Posted in Not too Much to Ask

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Wistful is the word. It has

Posted on Sun, 14 Jun 2020

Wistful is the word. It has this sense of memories ebbing and flowing. "We can make-believe it's Sunday, when the silence is only the pause before we begin again..." Superb. 

 

 

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Posted in Shark Eye Shell

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I love how the imagery and

Posted on Tue, 09 Jun 2020

I love how the imagery and dialogue are interlaced. The cloud imagery against the shop works really well together. You build a mood of lives changing in mundane moments, especially in the exchange where the guy says,  "Shur I’ve me whole life...

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Posted in You Wouldn't Call It An Earthquake Exactly

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