Raef_Boylan

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I have 7 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 9672 times and 6 of my stories have been cherry picked.
5 of my 43 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 5 votes

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Raef Boylan

 

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SHRUBS (Part Two)

(11: 22) Profoundly uncomfortable, I unzipped my bag and fished around inside without looking, faking nonchalance while keeping my eyes fixed on the...
Cherry

SHRUBS (Part One)

(11:04) I skidded down the last few feet of the dirt slope, dived through the overgrown entrance to The Shrubs and encountered a harsh example of...

One of Those Moments

He places the machine in its cradle, the sentences still echoing in his ears. Waits for a moment before heading into the living room where she’s...
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Another Day

Warning: contains an incident of grossness.
Cherry
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Nights Out

The boy had never felt so alone...
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5 of my comments have received 5 Great Feedback votes

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I liked the style of this,

Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014

I liked the style of this, lots of things given new character through metaphor. The only constructive criticism I can think to offer is regarding the use of "grow" in the first stanza when you also have "growing up" - is there another, more...

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Posted in Art Deco Child

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This flows well and the

Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014

This flows well and the narrative voice is solid - you've created a protagonist people can relate to. I suggest going through and checking your tenses, as it flicks from past to present a few times: "place was packed...She wore (past)...she jumps...

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Posted in Out of Control-5

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This is a solid poem,

Posted on Sat, 24 Aug 2013

This is a solid poem, skilfully structured with a great rhythm. The little bits of green and untouched nature scattered around a city can jump out at us all the more because of their surroundings; I think concrete provides a good contrast and...

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Posted in Nature in the City

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This captures the fear and

Posted on Tue, 15 Nov 2011

This captures the fear and uncertainty of being human really well. There are no warranties for life, no way to peek a few chapters ahead and decide whether to stick with this book or discard it for something more promising. The future can eat us...

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Posted in Me, Myself, I and my Other