A falling World

Oof this is a first draft from someone who has never succesfully written a first chapter before, but I wrote one this time and I'm keeping the momentum train going! If you've discovered this collection then grab a beer and watch me hit every tree I encounter. Below is the description I made before I got the story really started!

This collection is intended to serve as a first draft of a story I am interested in writing which combines a few themes like the banality of evil, reconciliation, dissociation from others, and a few others in a high fantasy setting where there is heaven, hell, and the fae. All three of which are separated from Earth with harsh consequences for those who breach that system.

Any and all criticism is wholeheartidly welcome and encouraged! :)