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I have a thin skin. I sometimes get aggy. I always realise it in a few days and feel bad about it. If I get aggy with you, I will be sorry. Seriously I appreciate the reads. A thousand thanks.
30 of my comments have received 31 Great Feedback votes
I liked the narrative here.
Posted on Sun, 18 Jan 2015
I liked the narrative here. The dense internal rhymes and alliteration create some punchy rhythms and the metaphor of the running with wear and tear of experience is an interesting one. I think this is a poem that would sound really good being...Read full comment
Posted in Once, We Were Runners
Now that's a healthy comment
Posted on Thu, 08 Jan 2015
Now that's a healthy comment section! Hi. I really liked the story and I like that the ending has a nice partial resolution.
For me these phrases are a little odd and you might rejig them in the redraft.
'Paul screwed his eyes up. A...Read full comment
Posted in A Bowl of Water Falls
a pretty dull rock
Posted on Wed, 31 Dec 2014
Wow Parson. This was surpirisingly interesting. It sort of begins as a ramble but I have to say that I really enjoyed reading it. As a reader it doesn't get much better than that.
Your poem 'Tweed' (I think) was my favourite piece that I...Read full comment
Posted in New Year Thoughts of a Simple Man
Wasn't there a competition
Posted on Thu, 04 Sep 2014
Wasn't there a competition with the theme of 'Joy'? If there is, I think you could definitely extend this (if extension is necessary). It's a really well structured narrative. I cannot overstate how much I appreciate your 'proper' stories. This...Read full comment
Posted in Joy
I'm going to be honest and
Posted on Wed, 27 Aug 2014
I'm going to be honest and say that this isn't for me, but it is really clean and tough and cold. It's definitely a skillful piece of writing. I like that the clinical language matches the content.Read full comment
Posted in Spit Out the Bugs in Your Mouth
Too mad for me to analyse so
Posted on Fri, 29 Aug 2014
Too mad for me to analyse so I'll just say that you don't need the quotation marks in a script. This looks strangely familiar. ;)Read full comment