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I have 6 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 1039 times and 8 of my stories have been cherry picked.
3 of my 20 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 3 votes

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Jeremiad

I used to think I was my own worst enemy and so did many of my friends. But I wanted to find out for sure. So I kept a diary: a record of faces and...
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Game of Thrones

Corruption and deformity must haunt the major dynasty: a scheming witch, licentious imp, a severed hand, sadistic prince; suggestions of incest,...
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Alf Ramsey – My Part In His Triumph

Around the time Cup Finals were first shown live on TV and towers were erected overlooking our back garden with the lawn striped and manicured just...
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Adopting At Our Age

This poem went places that it shouldn’t have gone in the beer tent listening to a jazz ensemble, who came on after the dance band and are suffering...

Day Unresolved

So un-asleep, the sheet’s a beach of footprints waiting for the tide. Her shape is question-marked, crucified, an inquisition scales her eyes...
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3 of my comments have received 3 Great Feedback votes

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I think you've improved it.

Posted on Mon, 19 Oct 2020

I think you've improved it. Bit too fond of hyphenated phrases, but I liked coiled cold and sequin sounds very much. 

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Posted in pool, october

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Well, I wouldn't delete as

Posted on Mon, 12 Oct 2020

Well, I wouldn't delete as there's a lot to like. But the switch from Butler-Lytton to McGonagall needs a bit more finesse. Wasn't his most famous poem about a fallen bridge? Perhaps a bridge is the answer. 

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Posted in To Be or Not To Be A Poet

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I Look Up

Posted on Fri, 10 Apr 2020

Enjoyed, the last 3 lines are lovely. Can't get my head around these lines, though -

By midnight, respite in invisibility

bar the matt absence of stars

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Posted in I Look Up