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Summer is loudest, their windows fly open, voices vault fences and enter our house. Screaming at children, beer bottles broken, cursing and knocking...
Well, I wouldn't delete as there's a lot to like. But the switch from Butler-Lytton to McGonagall needs a bit more finesse. Wasn't his most famous poem about a fallen bridge? Perhaps a bridge is the answer.
I think you've improved it.
Posted on Mon, 19 Oct 2020
I think you've improved it. Bit too fond of hyphenated phrases, but I liked coiled cold and sequin sounds very much.
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Well, I wouldn't delete as
Posted on Mon, 12 Oct 2020
Well, I wouldn't delete as there's a lot to like. But the switch from Butler-Lytton to McGonagall needs a bit more finesse. Wasn't his most famous poem about a fallen bridge? Perhaps a bridge is the answer.
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I Look Up
Posted on Fri, 10 Apr 2020
Enjoyed, the last 3 lines are lovely. Can't get my head around these lines, though -
By midnight, respite in invisibility
bar the matt absence of stars
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