Technically Inept

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How can I have more feeling in this scene without making this more cringy?

It's supposed to be KIND OF emotional, for it's one that marks the start of a change in one of my characters. (Keep expectations low lol) I provide a little bit of context, and then the scene itself. How can I accomplish the goal in the title, or make it better in other ways?

Jason and Angel Meet

It's not an actual story. Moreso just a relatively brief introduction to the characters of the "story" in my head. Starts lighthearted, and then get's SLIGHTLY serious at the end. If it wasn't obvious, I am only really starting to get into writing. Any thoughts would be helpful.