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My stories have been read 68526 times and 37 of my stories have been cherry picked.
24 of my 449 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 24 votes

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Elliott Bradley

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Cherry

China Songbird - re written

reworked and reposted thanks to great feedback.
Cherry

Chandelier

Edited and reposted.
Gold cherry

Epitaphs

Cherry

Legacy

Cherry

Little

moving on...
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24 of my comments have received 24 Great Feedback votes

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I like this too, and get the

Posted on Wed, 01 Jul 2015

I like this too, and get the sentiments which are finely expressed. If I had one criticism it would be that for the most part, you lean heavily on alliteration,  and near the start, especially 'p' words. Toward the end this evens out and feels...

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Posted in Surface Tension

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Very visual and carefully

Posted on Sat, 27 Jun 2015

Very visual and carefully worded without waste. Did you mean 'your mayfly's dare, (is) to roam.' or 'your mayflies dare to roam' ? Wasn't sure. Excellent though.

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Posted in ‘Coming Home’

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Nicely rhyming and not too

Posted on Tue, 23 Jun 2015

Nicely rhyming and not too obvious, with some lovely flowing lines.

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Posted in While you were sleeping

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Interesting stream of

Posted on Wed, 24 Jun 2015

Interesting stream of thoughts. I get that feeling too. The harder we try to get it right, the further away from the actual reality it all becomes. But then we'll keep writing it anyway. Just keep going mate, or what's left? An honest lack of...

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Posted in (dis)Honesty

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You make the scenery sound

Posted on Thu, 18 Jun 2015

You make the scenery sound exciting and enticing. Works well with the rhyme.   

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Posted in Up to the Wind

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Describes well a turning

Posted on Wed, 03 Jun 2015

Describes well a turning around from delusion using colour. The words flow like paint.

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Posted in gray delusion

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With a longer life expectancy

Posted on Mon, 01 Jun 2015

With a longer life expectancy, more aging children will be caring for their parents. It's hard, but as you point out, there are rewards, and hopefully some welcome, if unasked for assistance from an occasional kind hearted soul who sees a need....

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Posted in Aging Carer

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The quiet and shy have learnt

Posted on Sun, 26 Apr 2015

The quiet and shy have learnt how to brave and cover up their true nature. Most often we are not allowed to be ourselves, as demonstrated by the automatic derogatory reactions to sensitive personal revelations. You built this up so naturally and...

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Posted in Who Knows?

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Every line counts.

Posted on Thu, 30 Apr 2015

Every line counts.

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Posted in An Uneasy Truce

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A worthy subject,

Posted on Thu, 30 Apr 2015

A worthy subject, thoughtfully penned. I feel that the rhyme and jaunty rhythm detract a little from the meaning, and also not sure they'd dream of gingerbread, but a stark picture painted.  

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Posted in Famine

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