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how about keeping the
Posted on Tue, 12 Jan 2016
how about keeping the kamikaze mention on the TV documentary, then have dead german pilots/bombers in the man's memories. I think the Japanese only operated in the East and against the Us forces. You'd really lose something if you had to do away...
Read full commentPosted in As long as sea beats on stone
A well-painted authentic
Posted on Thu, 07 Jan 2016
A well-painted authentic picture albeit a grim one. There are a couple of places where the present tense shouldn't be.
Read full commentPosted in The Drop Zone
The fourth and fifth
Posted on Sun, 27 Dec 2015
The fourth and fifth paragraph need some editing (typos etc) and are a little confusing in places. Other than that I really enjoyed this. A really good introduction and a fabulous ending - well done!
Read full commentPosted in The Glasses
what a beautiful rhythm this
Posted on Sat, 26 Dec 2015
what a beautiful rhythm this has bee
Read full commentPosted in You Send Me
a very interesting piece!
Posted on Sat, 26 Dec 2015
a very interesting piece!
Read full commentPosted in “We must dare to invent the future”
nice dialogue!
Posted on Sat, 19 Dec 2015
nice dialogue!
Read full commentPosted in AlterNativity - Part 4 - Get Away! In A Manger
Very nice! Two terrifyingly
Posted on Sun, 13 Dec 2015
Very nice! Two terrifyingly vivid characters I very much look forward to reading more about.
there's a 'was' missing from your penultimate para
Read full commentPosted in 'The first date' a chapter from my new novel 'And?'
A beautiful piece of memory.
Posted on Thu, 10 Dec 2015
A beautiful piece of memory. I was disappointed when it finished!
I think you have an autocorrect typo in the third para - where/were
Read full commentPosted in Josh Rimmer
I like the way you're
Posted on Mon, 07 Dec 2015
I like the way you're approaching it from different angles. Perhaps you should make clear in the title this is a part of the previous story?
Read full commentPosted in The Ripped T-shirt III - Whiskey & Justice on the rocks
There's some wonderful
Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015
There's some wonderful imagery in this piece, although it needs a little edit as it is perhaps a bit repetitive in places - also some grammatical typos (eg don't/doesn't). Welcome to ABC!
Read full commentPosted in The Fallen one
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