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Some delicious description in
Posted on Wed, 20 Feb 2019
Some delicious description in this Rhiannon. Are we still missing our Elms, or did they find a disease resistant variety to replant with?
Read full commentPosted in The fruit of the elm
It's all happening in this
Posted on Sat, 16 Feb 2019
It's all happening in this part! Maybe when you do the next draft - I know you have a lot of information to get out but I'm not completely sure the dilaogue sounds as natural here as it usually does
Read full commentPosted in Angel 28 (proposal)
'I don’t here anything from
Posted on Tue, 12 Feb 2019
'I don’t here anything from him.' hear
the scene between Karen and Angel is really touching
Has she had a tooth knocked out?
Keep going!
Read full commentPosted in Angel 24 (Corton Vale)
‘That’s no what you’re friend
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
‘That’s no what you’re friend Kimmie says. She says you were partying and she went into the room with one of his friends and she came into the living room after hearing a whaling noise '
your friend Kimmie. a wailing noise. Also I don't...
Read full commentPosted in Angel (change and charges)
The way in which you show the
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
The way in which you show the different reactions build up a very believable picture - so sad.
You've put the correct rating on this piece, however the preview needs to be U rated as it appears on the front page of the site. Could you...
Read full commentPosted in Matthew
Perhaps you'll finish it now
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
Perhaps you'll finish it now and let us see the result? I enjoyed this, although if you're looking for suggestions I'd say it begins to meander a little once you start talking about the various experts
Read full commentPosted in PCT Beginning
I love seeing that someone's
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
I love seeing that someone's been inspired by another person's work on here, and this is the second time in as many days (see Jenny's piece inspired by celticman). This is short but says everything needed - thank you for posting it Di
Read full commentPosted in driverless
yes, it did become clear once
Posted on Sat, 09 Feb 2019
yes, it did become clear once I'd read on (not before I'd wondered whether it was a typo and you'd meant snacks perhaps), but it was a shame it interrupted the flow of reading. I wonder if you could change it for something else? Clicking maybe?...
Read full commentPosted in Above Clun
I think it's also a diuretic
Posted on Fri, 08 Feb 2019
I think it's also a diuretic so don't have Ed's drink and go on a long car journey!
Read full commentPosted in Dandelions
Brilliant! A wonderful little
Posted on Mon, 28 Jan 2019
Brilliant! A wonderful little slice of magic - you have placed everything just right - not too much of the magic and not too much of the present, and the dialogue was perfect too. Well done.
Read full commentPosted in Walk In The Park With Snow (Part 2 of 2)
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