Jane Hyphen
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I have 394 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 855463 times
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510 of my 2,748 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 539 votes
My stories
It feels like winter here
It feels like winter here The bone frames of you and me Clutching our own hands Blue flesh scars exposed as Frost forms on each word Light casts us...
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Strange Light
Strange light in the sky And in your eyes Listen…. Don’t stay too long In this strange place Where only shadows Show themselves To draw you in...
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September Chills
September The dread tread Of rolling bombs Loose in the pit Of my stomach Cold dawn New term chills Crack whack jabs Of hockey sticks Torture of team...
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Echoes of a Dead Whale
If you could hear my song You’d know we shared the stars Jewels immersed forever ours Echoes locked inside fathoms Among dead men and gardens If you...
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A Man Riding the Tube Train
A man riding the tube train Sitting in the sallow grease of his day His dreams in his father’s briefcase Dropping the filings of his doubts Into a...
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'Somewhere like yesterday'
Posted on Mon, 11 Feb 2019
'Somewhere like yesterday' sad truth in these words and it's a beautiful poem too. Thanks for linking it to mine. I also love to see work inspired by other writers on here as I'm so often inspired myself.
Read full commentPosted in driverless
Thanks celticman. Your
Posted on Mon, 04 Feb 2019
Thanks celticman. Your comments in riddley rhyme motivate me time after time.
Read full commentPosted in Bedtime Rituals
I love 'pure pearls' Rhiannon
Posted on Mon, 04 Feb 2019
I love 'pure pearls' Rhiannon and also 'rich greening'. They are such a pure little flower braving the cold and warming the beds for the spring flowers to come.
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It's so beautiful Rhiannon, I
Posted on Sat, 02 Feb 2019
It's so beautiful Rhiannon, I don't think I've ever seen one of these birds and your poem is a graceful tribute.
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This is neat. It makes me
Posted on Sat, 02 Feb 2019
This is neat. It makes me think of all those molecules and everything else sleeping, unseen, there's so much we don't see. Looking forward to warmer times, mercury creeping.
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Thanks Di_Hard I have removed
Posted on Tue, 29 Jan 2019
Thanks Di_Hard I have removed a repeated word. That's interesting about the rain, I hadn't realised it was such a factor. As for not letting your son have a bike, I'm not sure how you stop them if they are hell bent on it but the statistics are...
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For a short story this has
Posted on Sun, 13 Jan 2019
For a short story this has got it all; charm and chargrin, adversity and perversity. I think it's just perfect and like all your pieces it played out in glorious tecnicolour in my mind's eye.
Read full commentPosted in grab a granny
I think this is pure quality.
Posted on Fri, 07 Dec 2018
I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.
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I'm really enjoying these,
Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018
I'm really enjoying these, well-written and engaging. I too liked the description of the high heels stabbing the carpet, honestly why would you wear high heels in a care home, even if you were a rabied manager on a power trip. Your brother's...
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Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't
Posted on Fri, 09 Nov 2018
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't even imagine the itchy wool uniform in the cold wet weather, it's difficult to even scratch the surface of what those soldiers suffered. I agree about society being eroded, we are slowly losing the building blocks of a...
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