156 of my comments have received 163 Great Feedback votes
Just found time to sit down
Posted on Sun, 12 Nov 2017
Just found time to sit down and read this, maisie.
I like the idea of it being spoken by a veteran. And I like the fact that it avoids the cliché and talks about broken promises and waste. It makes the point nicely.Read full comment
Posted in Civic Duty
A touching and nicely written
Posted on Sun, 22 Oct 2017
A touching and nicely written piece, Biggus. Not merely sentimental. It conveys real human warmth.Read full comment
Lovely link between oil,
Posted on Tue, 14 May 2013
Lovely link between oil, water and paint. My dad used to spend cold nights under his cars, self-taught and following Haynes manuals under a lead-lamp in the middle of winter. I followed him that far, but no further. My poor son, denied contact,...Read full comment
Posted in Viscosity
Lovely, sean mcnulty. A
Posted on Sat, 12 Aug 2017
Lovely, sean mcnulty. A sense of everything slipping through your fingers. Hovers nicely between thoughts and things. I love how you zoom/focus in on the man for a moment then move straight on with your stream of thought. Felt like I was...Read full comment
Posted in The Treetops
Warts an' all rendition. I
Posted on Fri, 11 Aug 2017
Warts an' all rendition. I love the fact you keep this human and individual, because that's where it's at.
Contradictorally (no squiggly red line!) my mind jumped straight to structures: the before and after. Trying to rationally manage and...
This is great. Epic and so
Posted on Mon, 31 Jul 2017
This is great. Epic and so much humanity. It might have been written by H.G. Wells. If there's one thought it leaves as far as the aesthetic goes, having established a meter, it might be worth looking at the penultimate stanza again to see if the...Read full comment