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571 of my 3,614 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 600 votes
Assorted writers' groups, the odd anthology, occasional readings. Lots of looking out of the window. Hello, and thanks for dropping by.
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Subtle and sad. Such
Posted on Fri, 11 Sep 2015
Subtle and sad. Such effective imagery, especially with the daisies at the end. It's only when you reach the second part of the poem that you realise the current of unease has been there all along.
Read full commentPosted in The One...
Intriguing. Strong
Posted on Wed, 09 Sep 2015
Intriguing. Strong descriptions - the grey of things and the houses as 'almost protecting'. The hints that this is not the first time for this scenario. Is this stand alone or will we find out more? I hope more! Welcome to ABC Tales.
Read full commentPosted in Into the Shadows
Wonderful use of language.
Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015
Wonderful use of language. That opening paragraph has the reader hooked, and the image of palms of velcro is so very evocative. The final paragraph hints at all the emotional turmoil experience says is to come. Acutely observed.
Read full commentPosted in The fourth kiss
And I've always been rather
Posted on Sat, 29 Aug 2015
And I've always been rather fond of liver...
I enjoyed this. Very visceral, and the physical descriptions are particularly good. Anna's character is also well drawn at the beginning. I wasn't quite sure about the final paragraph. I...
Read full commentPosted in Upon the Hills of Far Darrig
The structure really does
Posted on Wed, 26 Aug 2015
The structure really does work with the content. The poem grabs you and won't let go. The sadness, the disappointment, the despair, all conveyed with precision but no loss of emotion. I am glad to hear you found it therapeutic to write. It...
Read full commentPosted in Post mortem results
Very interesting ideas - when
Posted on Thu, 25 Jun 2015
Very interesting ideas - when gods do not want to be gods. Another thing I like is that I still cannot see how it is going to turn out, which is really good and keeping me hooked. One small typo - I assume you meant 'veracity' rather than '...
Read full commentPosted in Chapter 11 Conquest of Chimera
This is very good. I love
Posted on Thu, 25 Jun 2015
This is very good. I love horror stories but they're so difficult to get right. This one works because of the tropes Stephen has already mentioned, drawing you in, initially making you smile and relax a bit, then adding to the insistence and...
Read full commentPosted in Not your story
The way you build up the
Posted on Fri, 26 Jun 2015
The way you build up the tension, and set up so many questions about how this is going to resolve (or not) is so impressive, and all the details of Dave's 'safe space' bring the situation so alive. It's genuinely heartbreaking. Great piece.
Read full commentPosted in Doing a good thing
I saw something like this
Posted on Fri, 26 Jun 2015
I saw something like this once as a child, never since, and you've brought that magical moment back so vividly. And I loved 'pert as the nipples of a fool-hardy dipper' - wonderful image!
Read full commentPosted in Boxers in Yellow
Got interrupted when making
Posted on Sat, 13 Jun 2015
Got interrupted when making my last comment...meant also to say that I really liked the way you joined up the idea of sacrifice, from both sides and for the same purposes, at the end. Cracking last line, raising some good questions and making...
Read full commentPosted in Corporal Larnach’s Report 01 February 1833
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