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624 of my 3,755 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 658 votes

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Assorted writers' groups, the odd anthology, occasional readings.  Lots of looking out of the window.  Hello, and thanks for dropping by.

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624 of my comments have received 658 Great Feedback votes

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Subtle and sad. Such

Posted on Fri, 11 Sep 2015

Subtle and sad. Such effective imagery, especially with the daisies at the end.  It's only when you reach the second part of the poem that you realise the current of unease has been there all along. 

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Posted in The One...

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Intriguing.  Strong

Posted on Wed, 09 Sep 2015

Intriguing.  Strong descriptions - the grey of things and the houses as 'almost protecting'.  The hints that this is not the first time for this scenario.   Is this stand alone or will we find out more?  I hope more! Welcome to ABC Tales.

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Posted in Into the Shadows

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Wonderful use of language. 

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Wonderful use of language.  That opening paragraph has the reader hooked, and the image of palms of velcro is so very evocative.  The final paragraph hints at all the emotional turmoil experience says is to come.  Acutely observed.

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Posted in The fourth kiss

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And I've always been rather

Posted on Sat, 29 Aug 2015

And I've always been rather fond of liver...

I enjoyed this.  Very visceral, and the physical descriptions are particularly good.  Anna's character is also well drawn at the beginning.  I wasn't quite sure about the final paragraph.  I...

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Posted in Upon the Hills of Far Darrig

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The structure really does

Posted on Wed, 26 Aug 2015

The structure really does work with the content.  The poem grabs you and won't let go.  The sadness, the disappointment, the despair, all conveyed with precision but no loss of emotion.  I am glad to hear you found it therapeutic to write.  It...

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Posted in Post mortem results

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Very interesting ideas - when

Posted on Thu, 25 Jun 2015

Very interesting ideas - when gods do not want to be gods.  Another thing I like is that I still cannot see how it is going to turn out, which is really good and keeping me hooked.  One small typo - I assume you meant 'veracity' rather than '...

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Posted in Chapter 11 Conquest of Chimera

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This is very good.  I love

Posted on Thu, 25 Jun 2015

This is very good.  I love horror stories but they're so difficult to get right.  This one works because of the tropes Stephen has already mentioned, drawing you in, initially making you smile and relax a bit, then adding to the insistence and...

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Posted in Not your story

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The way you build up the

Posted on Fri, 26 Jun 2015

The way you build up the tension, and set up so many questions about how this is going to resolve (or not) is so impressive, and all the details of Dave's 'safe space' bring the situation so alive.  It's genuinely heartbreaking.  Great piece.

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Posted in Doing a good thing

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I saw something like this

Posted on Fri, 26 Jun 2015

I saw something like this once as a child, never since, and you've brought that magical moment back so vividly.  And I loved 'pert as the nipples of a fool-hardy dipper' - wonderful image!

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Posted in Boxers in Yellow

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Got interrupted when making

Posted on Sat, 13 Jun 2015

Got interrupted when making my last comment...meant also to say that I really liked the way you joined up the idea of sacrifice, from both sides and for the same purposes, at the end.  Cracking  last line, raising some good questions and making...

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Posted in Corporal Larnach’s Report 01 February 1833

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