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I have 72 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 57787 times and 38 of my stories have been cherry picked.
14 of my 191 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 14 votes

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2nd book SOMETIMES THE WORLD IS TOO BEAUTIFUL, 2011, Texas Review Press. Amazon, barnesandnoble, Book Depository.

My stories

Beth Hart, Tremendous Blues

But Hart not exactly my type. I start her DVD, "Front and Center," 2018 NYC. Cruise, familiar Songs, until Hart launches into Tell Her You Belong To...

A Ceiling Bas-Relief

A CEILING BAS-RELIEF the Fontaine House 1. 1850. To typhus, the only boy of a tinsmith, lost. Off to the side of the mourning, swinging its neck, the...

Trilobite

Lisa called from a mineral shop In Nashville--a trilobite. I gave a long-held, treasured one, To R., later replaced it in Taos, Which became a gift...
Cherry

I Called Z Passably Pretty

And she was unhappy about it. I am either pretty, or beautiful, your choice. But you've always called me beautiful And so with you, in the sanctity...

Z

When I picture you, I see a little Girl, black-haired, chewing her lip. Serious, working to create A password to open up the world-- To recognize you...

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14 of my comments have received 14 Great Feedback votes

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Parson, you've got a poem

Posted on Tue, 29 May 2018

Parson, you've got a poem here. much too long, would starken it up. get rid of everything you can stand to, and maybe even a little more, anything that doesn't add to your poem dilutes it, the effect. perhaps make the exchanges, the speech, even...

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Posted in Carboniferous limestone

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a grim look into the way time

Posted on Sat, 08 Sep 2018

a grim look into the way time carries us along, the way the relationships of our youth are forever.  

 

 

 

 

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Posted in two-faced

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cut the first line, and

Posted on Thu, 19 Jul 2018

cut the first line, and

"O, to capture what's within, and get it down"

which may take care of the need for the first two

stanzas 3, 4, 5, 6 pretty self-indulgent, don't establish their reality.

 

you write a lot...

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Posted in Lost in a space

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hi, not to be argumentative,

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

hi, not to be argumentative, seeking discourse on your poem and not adversary, insert is a smart woman and she sees your poem as if written by a child. i don't, though your speaker seems to be naive, perhaps simple in a good way, which is why a...

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Posted in In your shoes

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take out :A life made bland

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

take out :A life made bland by ease." and see how it reads. reads cleanly, clearly, (apparenly my favorite words of the moment) to me. 

have to repeat, "Have you seen a real tree?" not only is it overkill, but it could be read as a bit...

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Posted in In your shoes

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hi, would cut the editorial

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

hi, would cut the editorial "A life made bland by ease."

would cut "Have you seen a real tree?" as overkill.

good poem Di.

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Posted in In your shoes

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if you have true love in tow

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

if you have true love in tow then all the rest is details.

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Posted in The art of keeping going

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Parson, oh Parson: you are

Posted on Sun, 10 Jun 2018

Parson, oh Parson: you are such a natural writer that i think you are sometimes lax. the pieces of yours that i've read have been to borrow another's comment on another of your poems, "gentle", in a good way, in a tolerant, encompassing way. that...

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Posted in Sunday morning street cafe

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the best piece i've read

Posted on Thu, 07 Jun 2018

the best piece i've read since my partial return to abc. nothing extraneous. always low-key, and just right. you create his reality, which, after all, is what many of us less obtrusively do for ourselves. high regard for this piece, Celticman....

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Posted in lookers

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Parson, okay, some

Posted on Sat, 19 May 2018

Parson, okay, some tightening, to a good effect i think.

The current caught us, pulled us to mid-stream.  (cut and)

"we kept our eyes closed, thought of innocent things." (cut and)

"you asked why i couldn't just lie with you...

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Posted in In the bottom of a boat

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