bosch

Primary tabs

TypeTitleAuthorRepliesLast updated
StoryAngel 71 (graveside) celticman81 week 4 hours ago
StoryPersonal Ad Update bosch21 week 5 hours ago
StoryKaty, A Ghost Story (IP) Insertponceyfre...431 month 2 weeks ago
StoryBrookhaven bosch21 month 3 weeks ago
StoryIn/Voluntary Noo81 month 3 weeks ago
StoryMiko bosch02 months 18 hours ago
StoryLand and Water - 2 Noo102 months 2 weeks ago
Storygood tears and bad. celticman93 months 2 weeks ago
StoryBeth Hart, Tremendous Blues bosch24 months 7 hours ago
Forum topicWAITING FOR ANOTHER VELVET MORNING by Julia Macpherson bosch44 months 1 week ago
StoryAngel 67 (night calls) celticman104 months 1 week ago
StoryWhole seashore314 months 3 weeks ago
StoryErin bosch44 months 3 weeks ago
StoryI Called Z Passably Pretty bosch85 months 6 days ago
StoryReport To The Boys bosch05 months 2 weeks ago
StoryHome is where... Parson Thru95 months 3 weeks ago
StoryFifteen-Years Later bosch45 months 3 weeks ago
StoryAngel 64 (old friends) celticman65 months 3 weeks ago
StoryBanshee bosch16 months 1 week ago
StoryRebecca bosch27 months 2 weeks ago
StoryThings that keep me awake at night Insertponceyfre...379 months 2 weeks ago
StoryLucky Insertponceyfre...5111 months 3 weeks ago
StoryA Friday Morning Rally Poem for the Dream I Never Had poetjude212 months 4 days ago
StoryOf one thing we can be certain Noo191 year 3 weeks ago
StoryTrilobite bosch21 year 1 month ago

Pages

My stories

Cherry

Miko

Woke early, rose Worked on a poem 2 cups of coffee On repeat St. Vincent Went to wake you A cup of hot, black coffee In hand, you pulled The covers...

Brookhaven

Jerene brought Swep V and Cannon To Brookhaven for a few days. They explored the yard, the back lot, Pilfered the playhouse, the attic, Dragging out...
1 likes
Cherry

Report To The Boys

Yes, I crossed over. Saw Maha and Granddaddy Drinking coffee, under trees. I have loved You Swep-- You Jeremy--each and every day Since you were born...
Cherry

Fifteen-Years Later

Jerene´s moved, to a nice house, A nice area, that Jeremy bought for her. ¨I must´ve done something right.¨ She sold our house. Has gotten a dog. We...
1 likes

Beth Hart, Tremendous Blues

But Hart not exactly my type. I start her DVD, "Front and Center," 2018 NYC. Cruise, familiar Songs, until Hart launches into Tell Her You Belong To...

Pages

16 of my comments have received 16 Great Feedback votes

2 Votes

Parson, you've got a poem

Posted on Tue, 29 May 2018

Parson, you've got a poem here. much too long, would starken it up. get rid of everything you can stand to, and maybe even a little more, anything that doesn't add to your poem dilutes it, the effect. perhaps make the exchanges, the speech, even...

Read full comment

Posted in Carboniferous limestone

1 Vote

¨i thought of the ruby red

Posted on Mon, 26 Aug 2019

¨i thought of the ruby red colour when i lost the baby. it came dripping out of me, but i already knew.¨

and so another tale of the disenfranchised, those without a voice. in my poems a key word is essence, and so in your prose, a stripped...

Read full comment

Posted in good tears and bad.

1 Vote

they will alwys be yours

Posted on Mon, 12 Aug 2019

they will alwys be yours

good story

Read full comment

Posted in Katy, A Ghost Story (IP)

1 Vote

a grim look into the way time

Posted on Sat, 08 Sep 2018

a grim look into the way time carries us along, the way the relationships of our youth are forever.  

 

 

 

 

Read full comment

Posted in two-faced

1 Vote

cut the first line, and

Posted on Thu, 19 Jul 2018

cut the first line, and

"O, to capture what's within, and get it down"

which may take care of the need for the first two

stanzas 3, 4, 5, 6 pretty self-indulgent, don't establish their reality.

 

you write a lot...

Read full comment

Posted in Lost in a space

1 Vote

hi, not to be argumentative,

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

hi, not to be argumentative, seeking discourse on your poem and not adversary, insert is a smart woman and she sees your poem as if written by a child. i don't, though your speaker seems to be naive, perhaps simple in a good way, which is why a...

Read full comment

Posted in In your shoes

1 Vote

take out :A life made bland

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

take out :A life made bland by ease." and see how it reads. reads cleanly, clearly, (apparenly my favorite words of the moment) to me. 

have to repeat, "Have you seen a real tree?" not only is it overkill, but it could be read as a bit...

Read full comment

Posted in In your shoes

1 Vote

hi, would cut the editorial

Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018

hi, would cut the editorial "A life made bland by ease."

would cut "Have you seen a real tree?" as overkill.

good poem Di.

Read full comment

Posted in In your shoes

1 Vote

if you have true love in tow

Posted on Thu, 14 Jun 2018

if you have true love in tow then all the rest is details.

Read full comment

Posted in The art of keeping going

1 Vote

Parson, oh Parson: you are

Posted on Sun, 10 Jun 2018

Parson, oh Parson: you are such a natural writer that i think you are sometimes lax. the pieces of yours that i've read have been to borrow another's comment on another of your poems, "gentle", in a good way, in a tolerant, encompassing way. that...

Read full comment

Posted in Sunday morning street cafe

Pages