Jude O'Flynn

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I have 4 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 596 times and 5 of my stories have been cherry picked.
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Cherry

Nick Names

(Chapter 4 of the formerly-known-as 'Crazy Diamond') Before we arrived, the college sent us a list of books to read in the summer, including two...
Cherry

Crazy Diamond (start of 3rd chapter)

They’ve herded us into halls of residence according to the alphabet, but it seems bizarre that one letter in a surname can determine who your friends...
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Crazy Diamond - the story begins...

My name is Nick Moore, which is also an instruction to steal things. Somehow, I’ve been accepted into Cambridge University. I’m single and the...
Cherry

Crazy Diamond

If only my parents could see me now: a pint of lager, a packet of ten Sovereign, the Pokemon-stickered guitar, the old NYC baseball cap still glued...

3 of my comments have received 3 Great Feedback votes

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I think at least a little

Posted on Sun, 06 Sep 2020

I think at least a little more detail about the circumstances that led to the break-up would be useful. Was it entirely impulsive? Did she or he do something terrible? I don't think it needs to be a big diversion from the story - indeed, I'm far...

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Posted in Fairground

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I enjoyed this - such a

Posted on Sun, 06 Sep 2020

I enjoyed this - such a strong sense of place. I'd like to find out more about the past (why did he split up with Sara?) and the future (does he end up working at the fairground or in the desert?)

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Posted in Fairground

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The line length and subject

Posted on Wed, 15 Jul 2020

The line length and subject matter remind me of Walt Whitman. And may I say I love the American use of 'fall' for autumn. Surely we should desribe spring as 'rise'?

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