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Matron secured herself into her apron. She took the hand-made card her children had presented her with that morning from her bag and slipped it into...
He saw my hibiscus face in sunlight, strong feet in warm dust, eyes that soaked up the world, thighs grasping heat from a horse’s flank. We listened...
Love the way this has ended, you kept Dorothy's family at arm's length and their coldness seemed so threatening to Akil it was a relief that he was removed. Lovely perspective.
The central part of the story works really well, a father shaken by the idea that it might have been his daughter who was killed and changing his life. I'd really like more of a sense of India.
A nice sense of voice and a good structure, building to revelation. I got a bit confused with the mother-in-law line, as I though the voice was a student's then moving to an older adult, but then is seemed to be a student's again, so perhaps...
Strange, like the BFG and the Soup Dragon for grown ups. Vivd description, it seems like an ancient form of toil and survival. The slippery shadow beasts seem sad despite the gruesome implications.
Read this and really liked it so went back to read the first chapters which I really liked too. I think the perspective works really well, shifting from one to another. Showing the world through Akil's eyes is particularly touching, the lovely...
I'm glad that this ended as a message of reassurance as the story truly is a parent's nightmare. Very well constructed, you create ebbs and flows of tension.
Wonderful writing, showing us
Posted on Wed, 17 Dec 2014
Wonderful writing, showing us the dark place.
Read full commentPosted in while the candle burns
Love the way this has ended,
Posted on Tue, 16 Dec 2014
Love the way this has ended, you kept Dorothy's family at arm's length and their coldness seemed so threatening to Akil it was a relief that he was removed. Lovely perspective.
Read full commentPosted in The Devil's Dish Served Six Different Ways (chapter 7)
The central part of the story
Posted on Tue, 16 Dec 2014
The central part of the story works really well, a father shaken by the idea that it might have been his daughter who was killed and changing his life. I'd really like more of a sense of India.
Read full commentPosted in THE REDEMPTION
This is so beautiful.
Posted on Sat, 13 Dec 2014
This is so beautiful.
Read full commentPosted in Waiting for a Train to Remember
A nice sense of voice and a
Posted on Thu, 11 Dec 2014
A nice sense of voice and a good structure, building to revelation. I got a bit confused with the mother-in-law line, as I though the voice was a student's then moving to an older adult, but then is seemed to be a student's again, so perhaps...
Read full commentPosted in A Walk in the Dusk
Strange, like the BFG and the
Posted on Thu, 11 Dec 2014
Strange, like the BFG and the Soup Dragon for grown ups. Vivd description, it seems like an ancient form of toil and survival. The slippery shadow beasts seem sad despite the gruesome implications.
Read full commentPosted in Shadow Cooking
Read this and really liked it
Posted on Wed, 10 Dec 2014
Read this and really liked it so went back to read the first chapters which I really liked too. I think the perspective works really well, shifting from one to another. Showing the world through Akil's eyes is particularly touching, the lovely...
Read full commentPosted in The Devil's Dish Served Six Different Ways (chapters 3 & 4)
This has such a comforting
Posted on Tue, 09 Dec 2014
This has such a comforting tone to it, death as nothing frightening but going home. I wouldn't say it was horror, perhaps the tag fantasy fits better.
Read full commentPosted in Bus Stop
I'm glad that this ended as a
Posted on Tue, 09 Dec 2014
I'm glad that this ended as a message of reassurance as the story truly is a parent's nightmare. Very well constructed, you create ebbs and flows of tension.
Read full commentPosted in Comfort Blanket
What a sweet story. Lovely
Posted on Mon, 08 Dec 2014
What a sweet story. Lovely for children at theis time of year.
Read full commentPosted in Rhiannon's Christmas
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