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Another good episode.  A typo

Posted on Thu, 20 Feb 2014

Another good episode.  A typo to consider:

"and then the guy just feel (fell) down".

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Posted in Tales of Ancient Rome: Salidia and Lydia Chapter 2

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I think that this is very

Posted on Wed, 19 Feb 2014

I think that this is very readable.  Ease back on the literal, for example:

"In a few heart beats he was on the ground dead and she was standing over him, glaring down in hatred at him"

the "in hatred" is completely...

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Posted in Tales of Ancient Rome: Lions in the Valley

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But who is he?  

Posted on Mon, 17 Feb 2014

But who is he?  

Good poem Leanne.

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Posted in Happy Camper

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A fantastic travelogue made

Posted on Mon, 10 Feb 2014

A fantastic travelogue made fascinating by the description of of the effects of cultural perception.  I hope that there is a second part to come that puts us 'in country' alongside of you.  This is a very good piece of writing Tina, more please...

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This episode reminds me why I

Posted on Tue, 11 Feb 2014

This episode reminds me why I'm stupid not to keep up with you as you post them.  

I too love the last paragraph - one of the best I've read in a long time but it's not just that last bit, the whole thing is good.  

As always your...

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Posted in school photos 46

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And it remains to this day

Posted on Thu, 06 Feb 2014

And it remains to this day one of the most disgraceful episodes of British colonialism among the litany of hundreds if not thousands of others.  Not in my name.

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Posted in Diego Garcia U.S. dishonourable Army base

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Damn fine poem.  Damn fine.

Posted on Fri, 31 Jan 2014

Damn fine poem.  Damn fine.

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Posted in For Twilight is softly slow breathing

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Hey Julian!  That's better.

Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2014

Hey Julian!  That's better.  It's a good poem.  I like the cheeky rhyme and the insouciance of the piece.  If I've misinterpreted I apologise.  

Welcome to ABCtales.

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Posted in Letter to a friend

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Hi Julian.  Welcome.  

Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2014

Hi Julian.  Welcome.  

Just a technical prompt if you don't mind?  You have posted your piece on your 'Front Page' rather than in a collection as it were.  I know that it takes a bit of getting used to but where we are writing now is where...

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Posted in Poem to a friend

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When dream sequences turn up

Posted on Thu, 16 Jan 2014

When dream sequences turn up I usually hunker down and wait for them to finish, but not with this one.    

I thought it to be pitched perfectly between real, eyes-wide-open cogency and the most awful Bedlam.  Stomach churning and with the...

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