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Jenny Is Right

Posted on Thu, 04 Sep 2014

I really like this one.  The rhyme is good and that quality is accentuated by a strong rhythm, the effect provides the reader with the sense that the poet is confident and trustworthy.

Very good.

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Posted in On Writing

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Just Read This

Posted on Mon, 01 Sep 2014

You are very good at tackling 'difficult' subjects that most of us avoid by taking the easy option and ignoring them.

 I'm glad Torscot clarified!  Of course I can see what she/he was getting at with the reversal of gender roles.

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Posted in SMACK - (edited)

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You're welcome.  Thank you

Posted on Tue, 05 Aug 2014

You're welcome.  Thank you regarding the Daniel series.  

You will find that writing prose for on-line reading has an effect on the discrete episodes.  It causes a faster pace to develop and the reader gets a pay-off for their efforts at...

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Posted in Thetis

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Philip, you will find

Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014

Philip, you will find ABCtales to be a supportive, nurturing and welcoming place.  There are many excellent writers here, you can learn lots - I for one should know - have a good nosey around the place.  Above all else I would encourage...

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Posted in Marking Time

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Quite!

Posted on Wed, 30 Jul 2014

Quite!

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Posted in Toady of toad hall. (a warning to children)

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Lovely overall images.  This

Posted on Thu, 24 Jul 2014

Lovely overall images.  This I found less delightfully unctuous than the rest:

"ever so slightly at the edges, and a blackbird

going home to roost, dreams of sleeping"

The italicised words seem less economical and...

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Posted in After the Heat Wave

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Personal opinion is that the

Posted on Wed, 23 Jul 2014

Personal opinion is that the capitalisation at the start of each line should be reconsidered.  That's my one editing observation out of the way.  

I think that this is a damn fine effort Dan.  Well done.

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Posted in Stopp

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This is really excellent Ed.

Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014

This is really excellent Ed.  

The collaging effect of the images as you maybe try the new television out and how you take us to a channel-surfed hell on earth is mesmerising.  

You do come up with some fabulous stuff, this yet but...

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Posted in All That Glitters . . . . .

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The more I've read this the

Posted on Tue, 22 Jul 2014

The more I've read this the better it's got.  Really assured and honest.  Your love for these leviathans is communicated with a graceful, poetic sentiment NOT sentimentality.  Makes the reader feel the same awe, or it does me at least.

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Posted in If souls inhabited machines

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A very interesting take on

Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014

A very interesting take on the human condition and asks the One Great Question for which there is no answer unless in blind belief or in the dogma of denial and rejection.  Spirituality or base humanism? You've got a huge amount going on in this...

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Posted in An Angels questioning lament

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