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Jenny Is Right
Posted on Thu, 04 Sep 2014
I really like this one. The rhyme is good and that quality is accentuated by a strong rhythm, the effect provides the reader with the sense that the poet is confident and trustworthy.
Very good.
Read full commentPosted in On Writing
Just Read This
Posted on Mon, 01 Sep 2014
You are very good at tackling 'difficult' subjects that most of us avoid by taking the easy option and ignoring them.
I'm glad Torscot clarified! Of course I can see what she/he was getting at with the reversal of gender roles.
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Read full commentPosted in SMACK - (edited)
You're welcome. Thank you
Posted on Tue, 05 Aug 2014
You're welcome. Thank you regarding the Daniel series.
You will find that writing prose for on-line reading has an effect on the discrete episodes. It causes a faster pace to develop and the reader gets a pay-off for their efforts at...
Read full commentPosted in Thetis
Philip, you will find
Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014
Philip, you will find ABCtales to be a supportive, nurturing and welcoming place. There are many excellent writers here, you can learn lots - I for one should know - have a good nosey around the place. Above all else I would encourage...
Read full commentPosted in Marking Time
Quite!
Posted on Wed, 30 Jul 2014
Quite!
Read full commentPosted in Toady of toad hall. (a warning to children)
Lovely overall images. This
Posted on Thu, 24 Jul 2014
Lovely overall images. This I found less delightfully unctuous than the rest:
"ever so slightly at the edges, and a blackbird
going home to roost, dreams of sleeping"
The italicised words seem less economical and...
Read full commentPosted in After the Heat Wave
Personal opinion is that the
Posted on Wed, 23 Jul 2014
Personal opinion is that the capitalisation at the start of each line should be reconsidered. That's my one editing observation out of the way.
I think that this is a damn fine effort Dan. Well done.
Read full commentPosted in Stopp
This is really excellent Ed.
Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014
This is really excellent Ed.
The collaging effect of the images as you maybe try the new television out and how you take us to a channel-surfed hell on earth is mesmerising.
You do come up with some fabulous stuff, this yet but...
Read full commentPosted in All That Glitters . . . . .
The more I've read this the
Posted on Tue, 22 Jul 2014
The more I've read this the better it's got. Really assured and honest. Your love for these leviathans is communicated with a graceful, poetic sentiment NOT sentimentality. Makes the reader feel the same awe, or it does me at least.
Read full commentPosted in If souls inhabited machines
A very interesting take on
Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2014
A very interesting take on the human condition and asks the One Great Question for which there is no answer unless in blind belief or in the dogma of denial and rejection. Spirituality or base humanism? You've got a huge amount going on in this...
Read full commentPosted in An Angels questioning lament
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