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Posted on Wed, 09 Jul 2014

Wish my teachers had been like that instead of being complete fails (apart from one).

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Posted in Creative Minds!!

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Sorry!

Posted on Sun, 06 Jul 2014

Do you mind saying how old you are?  This Jack the Ripper pastiche is excellent by the way.

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Posted in Chapter One: The Old Compton Street Murder

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Only you Lavadis, can write

Posted on Sat, 05 Jul 2014

Only you Lavadis, can write like this.  Brilliant.

An edit to consider?:

"This (is) my childhood dad,” said Daniel"

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Posted in ex - I'm every woman

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Absolutely f*<}|^g brilliant.

Posted on Tue, 01 Jul 2014

Absolutely f*<}|^g brilliant.

This is ace.

 

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Posted in The Gonts

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Good

Posted on Sun, 29 Jun 2014

Again slick and confident prose.  Perhaps consider tidying up the first three or four sentences?  There is some word repetition and it is a little clunky which is at odds with all that follows.  Just my opinion of course.

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Posted in 4. Mr Jordan LLC and Two Visits to the Same Joint

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Ha!

Posted on Sun, 29 Jun 2014

A good twist right at the end.  Well done Daveking71.

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Posted in Bathroom Ghost

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A Surprise!

Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014

I wasn't expecting prose Tina so it's a surprise and a welcome one too.  I'd like you to use the full width of the page more often lol.

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Posted in Fergal's Wake (I.P.)

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Palpable Tension

Posted on Wed, 25 Jun 2014

This continues to be pacey.  I like the balance between dialogue and description, I think that in this particular episode you have got it pretty much spot on.  Just be a little more aware of the action/reaction tags:

"Oldcastle marched...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Nine 1010 words

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8**(

Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014

Awful first memory.  So sorry.

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Posted in Walking Thru Shards Of Glass

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Lol!  Good one Mr.  A couple

Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014

Lol!  Good one Mr.  A couple of typos need your attention:

 

"Hes (He's) late they cry."

"She Walk (walks) in a strop."

"Dinners (Dinner's / Dinner is) on the table" (although it works as it appears in the poem)....

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Posted in Running Late

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