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Posted on Sat, 19 Jul 2014

Simple and simply delightful.  That it is simple in no way indicates that it was simple to write.  The simplest things are often the hardest ones too.  I love this edithrose.

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Posted in Reflection in you

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Excellent Taris

Posted on Thu, 10 Jul 2014

Feelings and sentiments powerfully expressed in this really neat poem.  I think that you have used the repetion of 'you weren't in the mood' to very great effect.  Well done to keep with that theme and trend, that show confidence and conviction...

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Posted in That One Phone Call

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8-))

Posted on Wed, 09 Jul 2014

Wish my teachers had been like that instead of being complete fails (apart from one).

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Posted in Creative Minds!!

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Sorry!

Posted on Sun, 06 Jul 2014

Do you mind saying how old you are?  This Jack the Ripper pastiche is excellent by the way.

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Posted in Chapter One: The Old Compton Street Murder

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Only you Lavadis, can write

Posted on Sat, 05 Jul 2014

Only you Lavadis, can write like this.  Brilliant.

An edit to consider?:

"This (is) my childhood dad,” said Daniel"

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Posted in ex - I'm every woman

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Absolutely f*<}|^g brilliant.

Posted on Tue, 01 Jul 2014

Absolutely f*<}|^g brilliant.

This is ace.

 

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Posted in The Gonts

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Good

Posted on Sun, 29 Jun 2014

Again slick and confident prose.  Perhaps consider tidying up the first three or four sentences?  There is some word repetition and it is a little clunky which is at odds with all that follows.  Just my opinion of course.

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Posted in 4. Mr Jordan LLC and Two Visits to the Same Joint

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Ha!

Posted on Sun, 29 Jun 2014

A good twist right at the end.  Well done Daveking71.

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Posted in Bathroom Ghost

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A Surprise!

Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014

I wasn't expecting prose Tina so it's a surprise and a welcome one too.  I'd like you to use the full width of the page more often lol.

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Posted in Fergal's Wake (I.P.)

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Palpable Tension

Posted on Wed, 25 Jun 2014

This continues to be pacey.  I like the balance between dialogue and description, I think that in this particular episode you have got it pretty much spot on.  Just be a little more aware of the action/reaction tags:

"Oldcastle marched...

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Posted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Nine 1010 words

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