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Another good one, even better

Posted on Fri, 10 Oct 2014

Another good one, even better than your first in my opinion.  Here are a couple of typos to sort out:

"She won't leave weather (whether) I".

"I've often though (thought) more people".

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Posted in Living on the Edge

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Well, I didn't see that

Posted on Fri, 10 Oct 2014

Well, I didn't see that coming!

Welcome to ABCtales.

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Posted in Blood on the Canvas

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I just want to say

Posted on Thu, 09 Oct 2014

I just want to say congratulations on your 800th cherry pick!  As far as I know that is an unprecedented achievement Tina.

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Posted in Albatross

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Good

Posted on Thu, 09 Oct 2014

Would benefit from a few minutes spent formatting the dialogue section in particularly but it's a very good start and there's a distinctive voice to be found in the rendering of this post-apocalyptic parish.  Well done Ewan.

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Posted in A Canticle on Gadarene

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"hovers over head (overhead)

Posted on Mon, 06 Oct 2014

Strong feeling communicated well.  The anxiety at the end is almost palpable.  Excellent actually.

I'm uncertain about using "It's" at the start of the second stanza.  In my opinion it lends an unecessary ambiguity - do the minutes belong...

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Posted in Pain Killer

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Oh yes.  Very good.  I agree

Posted on Thu, 02 Oct 2014

Oh yes.  Very good.  I agree with Mark about wanting to know more.  Action characters and character development and smooth dialogue.

Not keen on 'futilely' as an adverb (don't like adverbs period actually) that one definitely needs to go...

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Posted in The Distance Between Them

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Very good turn around with

Posted on Mon, 29 Sep 2014

Very good turn around with the start of the letter writing.  Well done and welcome.

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Posted in Abomination

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You have a good world

Posted on Tue, 16 Sep 2014

You have a good world developing here (I have read all three) full of vivid images and written up with confidence.  It's obvious that you are enjoying this story as am I.  Hold back a bit on the reaction tags:

"looking down at the red...

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Posted in Progeniture, Ch. 3

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No, you are absolutely right

Posted on Tue, 16 Sep 2014

No, you are absolutely right to have tagged it 'Young Writer' Joshua, that is exactly what it is for.  I questioned it because this is such a surprisingly accomplished piece of work from a young person.  I hope that doesn't sound patronising, it'...

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Posted in Back In Little League

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Like the assonance and the

Posted on Sun, 14 Sep 2014

Like the assonance and the alliteration very much Bee.  That, allied with the theme brings a particular feeling to this which I like very much.  Well done.

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