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197 of my comments have received 214 Great Feedback votes

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You have a good world

Posted on Tue, 16 Sep 2014

You have a good world developing here (I have read all three) full of vivid images and written up with confidence. It's obvious that you are enjoying this story as am I. Hold back a bit on the reaction tags:

"looking down at the red...

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Posted in Progeniture, Ch. 3

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No, you are absolutely right

Posted on Tue, 16 Sep 2014

No, you are absolutely right to have tagged it 'Young Writer' Joshua, that is exactly what it is for. I questioned it because this is such a surprisingly accomplished piece of work from a young person. I hope that doesn't sound patronising, it'...

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Posted in Back In Little League

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Like the assonance and the

Posted on Sun, 14 Sep 2014

Like the assonance and the alliteration very much Bee. That, allied with the theme brings a particular feeling to this which I like very much. Well done.

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Posted in You Said

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Love that song and loved that

Posted on Thu, 11 Sep 2014

Love that song and loved that advert too. Good one Alfie.

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Posted in The Most Amazing Gorilla

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I agree that she would be a

Posted on Tue, 09 Sep 2014

I agree that she would be a person that is likely to speak in cliched terms and would probably have a few (hidden) copies of Hello magazine somewhere in the house.

You have to be so careful that you don't let yourself fall into...

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Posted in Name Tag

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I liked the slow build of the

Posted on Tue, 09 Sep 2014

I liked the slow build of the terror and the descriptions set the atmosphere. The twist at the end seemed to arrive rather abruptly perhaps. Good story.

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Posted in The Newgate Witch

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