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Posted on Sat, 11 Apr 2015
Not pretentious at all, at least not in my opinion.
It's worth editing though. there are a few typos that draw unwanted attention. I thought that you were going to involve the narrator in some level of culpability towards the end. Maybe...Read full comment
Posted in My brother, the murderer.
Posted on Fri, 13 Feb 2015
This is proving to be a really excellent collection of poetry indeed.
I really like the whole thing here, however from the 'Your Daughters, my sons,' line the piece gains further strength and more movement. Time-shifting effectively in...Read full comment
Posted in For S., 8 Poems (7/8)