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I agree.  There is just

Posted on Wed, 11 Feb 2015

I agree.  There is just enough here.  Hypnotic in a way.  And I like the way that the is series unfolding.

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Posted in For S., 8 Poems (3-4)

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Oh Yes

Posted on Tue, 10 Feb 2015

There is un undeniable confidence - no - assurance to this poetry which I really admire.  The concision is also to be noted.  Very good indeed.

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Posted in For S., 8 Poems (1-2)

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Ok

Posted on Sat, 31 Jan 2015

I love that you are writing this Jake.  There's action, feeling, conflict and a little bit of very tactful sensuality.  I know that you are commited to this and good on you for it, see it through until the end and when it's finished...

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Posted in Luck (part I)

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Welcome Aravind.  Good story!

Posted on Tue, 27 Jan 2015

Welcome Aravind.  Good story!

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Posted in THE INTELLIGENT PIGEON

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Aargh!  the conflicting

Posted on Mon, 26 Jan 2015

Aargh!  the conflicting advice is so frustrating, I'd have added in the 'don't let her/him sleep on their front/ won't sleep on their back' battle.

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Posted in Breast is Best

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A typo:

Posted on Thu, 08 Jan 2015

Typo:

As I dove (dived) onto the bed I looked for her anus

 

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Posted in The Erection

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I would recommend that the

Posted on Sun, 04 Jan 2015

I would recommend that the comma in the first line and the full stop at the end should go, as should the hyphen in the ninth line.  A change of the enjambment there, in the ninth line, giving 'body of many parts' its own seperate line...

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Posted in The City Lives

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Very frustrating

Posted on Fri, 19 Dec 2014

Personally I'd delete the very last line.  Subjective opinion of course.  Untold numbers feel like this.

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Posted in An Idiot in the class

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I met someone that attempted

Posted on Sat, 20 Dec 2014

I met someone that attempted suicice by jumping from a motorway bridge.  He got it wrong.  How so?  he went through the windshield of an oncoming lorry, killed the driver and became quadriplegic himself in the process.

The other patients...

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Posted in How to Kill Yourself

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This is really good kilb.

Posted on Tue, 16 Dec 2014

So good this.  Maybe a tiny dip towards the last bit.  I'm all for lightness and brevity but maybe a few words extra to oil the changes (After he’d washed his hands Dougie-boy muttered: “See you later” and left.). 

This is me...

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Posted in The Devil's Dish Served Six Different Ways (chapters 5 & 6)

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