204 of my comments have received 222 Great Feedback votes
Welcome to ABCtales
Posted on Wed, 23 Sep 2015
It's absolutely worth writing more. The thing that comes across, at least to me, is your belief in and committment to this imaginary world. Thus far the characters seem convincing and interesting as well.
Inevitably there is room to look...Read full comment
Posted in Remember Earth
Posted on Sat, 12 Sep 2015
I think that this works well and acheives some of the very important necessities of poetry.
Good imagery. Figurative language used well. Personification - what's not to like!
I'd take care with the similies; the saline bag, the I...Read full comment
Posted in Deadly Beast
A bleak and well observed
Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015
A bleak and well observed cityscape. Makes me want to take a shower.
It does need a little TLC, business men is all one word (businessmen) as is white washed (whitewashed) for example. In the third last paragraph 'cities' should either...Read full comment
Posted in the cultural quarter pt 2
Posted on Thu, 20 Aug 2015
That's a great write and I completely agree with jolono's observations. The voice is authentic and unpretentious and there's an undeniable honesty and willingness to confont the things that are often pushed out of mind because that's the easier...Read full comment
Posted in I am not sorry