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A very realistic opening

Posted on Wed, 07 Oct 2015

A very realistic opening scene that commited me to the read well done.  A couple of points to consider:

'the bed eking (leaking?) wires'  'Eking' refers to making something last longer than it might.

'haul himself into a seating (...

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Posted in The Mezzotint Chapter 9 The Mezzotint

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Welcome to ABCtales

Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015

This is excellent.

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Posted in Autumn Wasp

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Echoes

Posted on Wed, 30 Sep 2015

This is really good.  

The tone, atmosphere and figurative approach to image making are so well balanced.  

And in the nicest possible way its form and metre took me back to the work of many of the romantic poets.  The metric ...

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Posted in My Self

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What atmosphere

Posted on Thu, 24 Sep 2015

This builds and builds to that final crescendo.  Killer last line of many fine preceeding ones.  

Washing the flesh of those rollmops down was palpably awful - in the best way.

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Posted in Meet the Folks

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Welcome to ABCtales

Posted on Wed, 23 Sep 2015

It's absolutely worth writing more.  The thing that comes across, at least to me, is your belief in and committment to this imaginary world.  Thus far the characters seem convincing and interesting as well.

Inevitably there is room to look...

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Posted in Remember Earth

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Good

Posted on Sat, 12 Sep 2015

I think that this works well and acheives some of the very important necessities of poetry.

Good imagery.  Figurative language used well.  Personification - what's not to like! 

I'd take care with the similies; the saline bag, the I...

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Posted in Deadly Beast

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:-)

Posted on Fri, 28 Aug 2015

The first three lines of the second stanza are really good.

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Posted in Love Endless Eternal and Unrequited

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I'd like this to stretch a

Posted on Wed, 26 Aug 2015

I'd like this to stretch a little further.  Strength and depth of feeling - really good.  Night queens is one word (nightqueens) and the revision doesn't compromise the syllable count.

Good one.

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Posted in The Harlot 2

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A bleak and well observed

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

A bleak and well observed cityscape.  Makes me want to take a shower.  

It does need a little TLC, business men is all one word (businessmen) as is white washed (whitewashed) for example.  In the third last paragraph 'cities' should either...

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Posted in the cultural quarter pt 2

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Very good

Posted on Mon, 24 Aug 2015

Great twist at the end and very frightening situation leading up to that.  Well done and welcome.

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Posted in The Viper

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