205 of my comments have received 223 Great Feedback votes
Lol! Good one Mr. A couple
Posted on Fri, 27 Jun 2014
Lol! Good one Mr. A couple of typos need your attention:
"Hes (He's) late they cry."
"She Walk (walks) in a strop."
"Dinners (Dinner's / Dinner is) on the table" (although it works as it appears in the poem)....Read full comment
Posted in Running Late
Posted on Tue, 24 Jun 2014
Ed, this is really excellent. The claustrophobia of the murder scene at the end is incredible. A convincing voice too. The themes of I'll gotten gains, disloyalty, the thickness of thieves and revenge takes a leap off the screen. Well done....Read full comment
Posted in X-Ray and I
Posted on Sat, 21 Jun 2014
So delicately written Richard. This whole series has been a joy to read, keep them coming.
"stretched it out as far as they (it) would go"Read full comment
Posted on Wed, 18 Jun 2014
Ok you said that you would value some feedback? First off, I would caution you against telling people that they can be 'brutal' it can and often does cause the recipient more pain than gain. I am not going to be brutal, there is never any need...Read full comment
Posted on Thu, 12 Jun 2014
Excellent feedback from magicdarer and I can see that edit suggestion from Bee has been acted on. I think that it was the right alteration to make.
I have read this a number of times and my admiration has grown over time. The themes and...Read full comment
Posted in Pretty Wings