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Justified Anger
Posted on Wed, 11 Jun 2014
So totally agree with this AD1. I said somewhere else that every single one of those spikes is this country's shameless equivalent of an African blood diamond. What has this country been brought to. It is an utter, unmitigated DISGRACE.
Read full commentPosted in The Bloody Spikes
Wow!
Posted on Tue, 10 Jun 2014
That is powerful. The raw emotion tumbles out of it like the rocks out of the back of that lorry. Odd that we both should touch on the theme of hypocrisy but approach it in different ways and different genres. Conviction oozes out from this...
Read full commentPosted in Crime and Punishment
Superb!
Posted on Fri, 06 Jun 2014
This gets better and better as it progresses. So many good things could be said about this one paul_a. But I'll just leave it at that. Well done.
Read full commentPosted in Just Add Egg
A pacey and well written piece.
Posted on Sun, 01 Jun 2014
Some typos to edit out. Here's one to start with:
"She could almost taste the Warnick’s Advocat (Warninks Advocaat)."
and:
"I though (thought) chanting was supposed to chillax you?
This is...
Read full commentPosted in The Joke
Little typos markle:
Posted on Wed, 21 May 2014
Little typos markle:
"But wheat (what) my teacher always aimed for"
"and we (?) other good teachers also came with us"
"Yes, we sand (sang) cheery"
This is lovely prose and your gentle yet assured writing style makes...
Read full commentPosted in A Guide
The last three stanzas are
Posted on Thu, 22 May 2014
The last three stanzas are the money shot of this charming poem. Well done.
Read full commentPosted in spellbound
Hi again Michael. Poetry
Posted on Tue, 13 May 2014
Hi again Michael. Poetry this time eh? It's not without merit. I admire the constancy of the image that you have used; water, ocean, darkness and depth. It often pays to limit the imagery and the themes within a poem and thereby increase the...
Read full commentPosted in Oceanic
"peering into the barrows
Posted on Tue, 13 May 2014
"peering into the barrows (barrow's) dark opening"
"thunderclap rent the air and the rock before him rent in two." The repetition of 'rent' seems a little clumsy, maybe the rock could 'split' in two?
Ooh! What an intriguing tale,...
Read full commentPosted in Children of the Barrow
Ha! Fatboy this is an
Posted on Tue, 13 May 2014
Ha! Fatboy this is an absolute beauty. Use of language and imagery, the play on the vocabulary of munitions and things military and the final few raw phrases all combine to provide poetry of the highest standard.
It's so wonderful to...
Read full commentPosted in The Lookout Boy
Deep stuff on show here Sari.
Posted on Tue, 13 May 2014
Deep stuff on show here Sari. Nice poem, well done and welcome back to ABCtales!
Read full commentPosted in The warrior of dreams come true
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