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202 of my comments have received 219 Great Feedback votes

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This is so good.

Posted on Sun, 08 Dec 2013

This is so good.

The immediacy of the foreboding and the dread of the encounter between the visitor (grown up child?) and the patient (parent/holocaust survivor possibly?) is effortlessly achieved. The horribly familiar 'it won't be...

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Posted in Paralysis and release

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There's a great rhythm here

Posted on Mon, 25 Nov 2013

There's a great rhythm here Lois. Well done.

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Posted in The Lie

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Some really stand out words,

Posted on Sun, 24 Nov 2013

Some really stand out words, lines, phrases and imagery in this wonderful poem that almost conjures an epic feel on the initial read. Very good indeed and congratulations on the cherry award, it's very much deserved.

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Posted in Within the Mirrors

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A damn fine poem. Welcome to

Posted on Mon, 18 Nov 2013

A damn fine poem. Welcome to ABCtales.

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Posted in The Taking.

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I agree with Mr Anderson. A

Posted on Mon, 18 Nov 2013

I agree with Mr Anderson. A few points if I may?

Be wary of semi-colons as punctuation marks no matter how insistent your auto-correct is. But here you have use a colon "Grain by grain I shrink and fall: shuddering to dust," that should...

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Posted in Buachaille Etive Mor (Glencoe)

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I like this poem very much,

Posted on Sat, 16 Nov 2013

I like this poem very much, there are some very good images and lines to savour. There is a strength and depth of feeling too which shows confidence. Well done.

I'm less certain about the title. It seems unnecessarily contrived. Why...

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Posted in Tears

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A litle typo Lois:

Posted on Sun, 10 Nov 2013

A litle typo Lois:

"And as the world continues to turn
they’ll (there'll be those of us who never learn"

But that's a minor point on what is a very good poem. Well done on the cherry pick too.

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Posted in A Fable

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