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I have 67 stories published in 5 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 22332 times and 56 of my stories have been cherry picked.
42 of my 158 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 45 votes

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My stories

Cherry

Last night we touched

Talking in tongues only the flesh understands We moved pulled by Saturn Driven by the tide surge Into the orbit of Mars Our fingers surfing the...
Cherry

Moving on

memories are all good and fine, but that's all they should be, the future waits.

Welsh Rarebit

memory of happiness
Cherry

Abundance

the capability to share makes us human
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Cherry

In the Shade of Achilles’ Shield

Part 4 in the Trojan Chronicles. Achilles reflects on Helen and the great love of his life.

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42 of my comments have received 45 Great Feedback votes

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Beautiful poem, and the last

Posted on Tue, 06 Apr 2021

Beautiful poem, and the last sentence is sublime.

It would be great if we could pick up time. My grandmother told me that life was all about making memories and stringing them like pearls into our souls, and at end of says we can take them...

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Posted in to pick up time

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visual in a verbal way.

Posted on Thu, 11 Feb 2021

visual in a verbal way. Nature's vistas can be inspiring. Wonderful poem.

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Posted in After the Blizzard

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This line is superb - 

Posted on Thu, 11 Feb 2021

This line is superb - 

"a mirror

of night in scissor-tailed sorcery."

And I must ask, why "biologically armed"? It invokes a picture of war, and not the serenity of love, or maybe that is my tinted glass view!

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Posted in Swallow-tailed Kites

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You have an eye for detail

Posted on Thu, 28 Jan 2021

You have an eye for detail and building the images for the reader.

The last line is a perfect ending: "and life was translucent." 

bhi

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Posted in A Secret Forest

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Beautiful creatures whose

Posted on Sat, 30 Jan 2021

Beautiful creatures whose grace and dilemma have been captured perfectly in this poem. 

These line:

"I sense the fray 

of identity against my need

to belong to anything, any

thing, when I do not know

why...

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Posted in Herring Gull

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This shows great empathy and

Posted on Thu, 14 Jan 2021

This shows great empathy and understanding of a country which does very often lead to an immediate "love/hate" relationship. The detail shows a sharp eye and the narrative flows very well with the interlinking of your back story with the...

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Posted in The Haunted Fort of Bhangarh

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Wonderful poem. LIke this

Posted on Tue, 12 Jan 2021

Wonderful poem. LIke this verse:

"The past leaves

Only prints, disordered.

Details burned beneath the acids

Of emotion, colours telling lies

Hiding in the fade of time"

 

Just one observation: did...

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Posted in The Edge of Colour

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There are some fantastic

Posted on Wed, 13 Jan 2021

There are some fantastic phrases in this poem, this in particular:

"Only

to be woken by crows,

black mornings, broken

by the flight of brimstone

butterflies in transformation."

Beautifully crafted....

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Posted in Oh, What’s That In The Hollow?

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healing

Posted on Sun, 20 Dec 2020

this is a wonderful healing poem. The measured pace forces each word to be savioured before moving on to the next and then the end which is the return to wonder. 

bhi

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Posted in Morning

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