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Wonderful read. Insanely jealous of your ability.
Posted on Wed, 06 Jun 2018
This was an absolutely wonderful read. From the opening lines I had total confidence that the writing would not let me down, that it would stay crisp and sharp and the coherence would be maintained. It is as if you have found the secret of...Read full comment
Posted in Duka's Return
I do like this...though I
Posted on Tue, 24 Jun 2014
I do like this...though I guessed early on where it was going to lead me, it didn't detract from the poem. The technical language of the imagery is nicely at odds with the actual subject. This creates a tension that brings the poem alive.
Posted in THE PUNCH BAG
I agree wholeheartedly with
Posted on Fri, 30 Jul 2021
I agree wholeheartedly with with Kilb50 about the poem, but I couldn't help noticing the title. Helen wasn't abducted. She was in cahoots with Paris all along. When the Trojans argued for sending her back, both she and Paris refused. Which is a...Read full comment
Posted in Notes by Menelaus on Helen’s Abduction
I have come back to this post
Posted on Sat, 27 Jun 2020
I have come back to this post several times today because I find its crispness refeshing. You have a very clean writing style which is naturally fluent and easy to read. You also know how to use the narrator's voice to manipulate atmosphere and...Read full comment
Posted in Black Catters
This resonated (second time I
Posted on Wed, 20 Jun 2018
This resonated (second time I've used that word today and it's only 9.30)
When I got hit by the depression juggernaut I didn't even know I was standing in the road. Apparently everyone else knew something was wrong but because I was busy...Read full comment
Posted in The Iceberg
The plot works, the pace is
Posted on Mon, 18 Jun 2018
The plot works, the pace is good, and there's an interesting twist at the end.
However, for me the narrator and her boyfriend feel stereotyped and because of that the overall story lacks a little bit of bite - even though the ending is...Read full comment
Posted in BAIT