Luke Neima

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I have 7 stories published in one collection on the site.
My stories have been read 12778 times and 7 of my stories have been cherry picked.
26 of my 302 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 30 votes

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Luke Neima

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The Final Journals of Dr. Peter Lurneman (Journal IV)

IV.I I can use the words, now. I had to work through two notebooks before I could move through the world again. Or rather it is the world that moves...
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The Final Journals of Dr. Peter Lurneman (Journal III)

III.I I felt much better this morning, but still somewhat disoriented. It is as if my perceptions are overdetermined. Each of my senses is greatly...
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The Passageway

There was this passageway, Long, rich, ferned. Pools, an old stairway, statuary. There are some leftover spines and a reading chair and the echo is...
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The Final Journals of Dr. Peter Lurneman (Journal II)

II.I Acacia falcata — Sabah, Malaysia: growth rate 1.2 inches/day. Bambusa Vulgaris — Burma: growth rate up to 3 ft/day. Both greatly overshadowed by...
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The Final Journals of Dr. Peter Lurneman (Journal I)

Editors’ note: After several months of debate we have decided to publish the succeeding text, a reproduction of the final field journals of Dr. Peter...

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26 of my comments have received 30 Great Feedback votes

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Such a well captured moment.

Posted on Wed, 11 Jun 2014

Such a well captured moment. I love the narrator's innocent perception of beauty, the flash of goodwill, as it gives way, immediately, into the old pool of venality.

Beautifully done socialeaf - keep them coming!

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Posted in The Termini Flower

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This is a strong opener, Vlad

Posted on Tue, 25 Mar 2014

This is a strong opener, Vlad - Vividly imagined and very well layed out, this is a fascinating and intriguing world you're introducing us to.

My suggestion, in terms of layout, would be to fold the exposition secition - the second bit -...

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Posted in Magic in Black, White, and Grey | Chapter 1: My Name is Aiymys Konrad

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You could take this farther.

Posted on Fri, 14 Feb 2014

You could take this farther. Reading, I feel like I'm witnessing the start of a much longer process of transformation within the character - as if this event is only the starting point for a much longer process of personal development. And you...

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Posted in Grandad's Party - Chapter 3 of 3

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I'm with scratch on this one.

Posted on Tue, 11 Feb 2014

I'm with scratch on this one. Can't believe I've let myself get behind. That last paragraph is a show-stopper. And that little suicide-knot in the light in paragraph one colours everything just so.

Should it be 'put' instead of 'putting'...

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Posted in school photos 46

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A great opener, bdeye. Lots

Posted on Tue, 08 Jul 2014

A great opener, bdeye. Lots of action and some great ideas. Would love to see where this goes.

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Posted in The Quiet Government Men Chapter 1

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I didn't expect that twist,

Posted on Tue, 24 Jun 2014

I didn't expect that twist, Ed - really well done!

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Posted in X-Ray and I

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Agreed. This is fantastic. I

Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014

Agreed. This is fantastic. I love the voice and perspective, here - so unexpected.

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Posted in Nettles

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A beautiful, heartfelt piece,

Posted on Wed, 04 Jun 2014

A beautiful, heartfelt piece, Anakin. The sincerity of your voice comes through so well!

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Posted in Angels gone

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Sharp, horrific, but rings

Posted on Sun, 11 May 2014

Sharp, horrific, but rings true throughout. A quick edit: 'Twenty boys... with curls that retreated into a skull like faces' (drop the 'a')

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Posted in uncovering oneself (2)

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I like it Sam, I like this

Posted on Thu, 08 May 2014

I like it Sam, I like this sense of being lost in the world of work, always between recreation and play and dissatisfaction. That really worked for me - the voice felt honest and real - and I wanted to read more (the best sign you can get from...

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Posted in Just do it

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