26 of my comments have received 30 Great Feedback votes
Such a well captured moment.
Posted on Wed, 11 Jun 2014
Such a well captured moment. I love the narrator's innocent perception of beauty, the flash of goodwill, as it gives way, immediately, into the old pool of venality.
Beautifully done socialeaf - keep them coming!Read full comment
Posted in The Termini Flower
This is a strong opener, Vlad
Posted on Tue, 25 Mar 2014
This is a strong opener, Vlad - Vividly imagined and very well layed out, this is a fascinating and intriguing world you're introducing us to.
My suggestion, in terms of layout, would be to fold the exposition secition - the second bit -...Read full comment
You could take this farther.
Posted on Fri, 14 Feb 2014
You could take this farther. Reading, I feel like I'm witnessing the start of a much longer process of transformation within the character - as if this event is only the starting point for a much longer process of personal development. And you...Read full comment
Posted in Grandad's Party - Chapter 3 of 3
I'm with scratch on this one.
Posted on Tue, 11 Feb 2014
I'm with scratch on this one. Can't believe I've let myself get behind. That last paragraph is a show-stopper. And that little suicide-knot in the light in paragraph one colours everything just so.
Should it be 'put' instead of 'putting'...Read full comment
Posted in school photos 46
I like it Sam, I like this
Posted on Thu, 08 May 2014
I like it Sam, I like this sense of being lost in the world of work, always between recreation and play and dissatisfaction. That really worked for me - the voice felt honest and real - and I wanted to read more (the best sign you can get from...Read full comment
Posted in Just do it